本期点评名师
张超 男,河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、市优秀英语教师、县骨干教师,从事英语教育教学工作29年;多年来,在省级以上报刊《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等发表文章数百篇,并有多篇论文获奖;曾参编高中版教辅资料《天天向上》和《三维方案》的编写工作,并荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;多次辅导多名学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。
How to Learn Chinese Well
Dear Carol,
I have just heard from you. I am really glad that youll come to Shijiazhuang to learn Chinese. In your letter, you ask① for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Believe it or not, Chinese is very useful in the world. However, youll find it a little difficult because Chinese is very different from English. I strongly advise you to remember as many Chinese characters as possible. Its also very important to read books, newspapers or② magazines in Chinese. In addition, watching TV, listening to the radio will be helpful and necessary. Besides, its a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because it will help you learn and remember Chinese words more easy③. Most important of all, you can talk with your Chinese friends in Chinese.
Hope to see you soon in Shijiazhuang.
Yours,
Pi Haoqing
河北省阜城縣第四中学九年级(9)班 皮浩青
点评
1. 优点:
本文主要是小作者给外国朋友提出的一些学习中文的建议,立意新颖,叙述有条理,逻辑严谨,书信写作格式正确。本文使用了一系列句型来提出建议,使文章内容更丰富并具有条理性。过渡词的恰当使用也是本文的亮点。 2. 需要修改的地方:
①ask改为asked。这里指的是发生在过去的动作,应用一般过去时。
②or改为and。这里表示顺承关系,而非选择关系,故or改为and。
③easy改为easily。副词easily修饰实义动词learn和remember,用作状语。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准,本文修改前可得18分。