于淼岩
During this summer vacation, my family and I went to Beijing. Beijing is so beautiful. We visited a lot of interesting places in it.
First, we came to the Palace Museum by subway. It was really crowded there. The guide told us that the Palace Mu?鄄seum had a long history. It s really very big and beautiful. If you want to know more about the Palace Museum, you can go to Beijing to have a look.
Then we went to the Great Wall. It s one of the greatest eight wonders in the world. It s the pride of Chinese. It was built in the Ming Dynasty. One who fails to reach the Great Wall is not a hero. If you have the chance, you can come to the Great Wall.
Finally, we went to visit the Bird s Nest, the Water Cube (水立方) and Temple of Heaven. I was really happy that day.
Five days later, we returned to our city. I decide to go to Beijing University in the future because it s my dream. So I must study hard from now on!
【教師点评】
本文是一篇刚刚进入九年级的学生写的作文。
小作者按时间顺序写出了自己在北京期间参观的名胜,也写出了自己的观后感。全文主题突出、层次清晰、行文流畅。文章结尾也表达了作者的美好愿望!
(指导教师:于长英)