书面表达高分要领

王琴芳

書面表达是英语试卷的压轴题目，也是区分度很好的一个题目。很多考生都想在书面表达上夺取高分，但是心有余而力不足。做到以下几点，可以让阅卷老师更青睐你的作文，为你的作文赢得高分。

一、审题要严、定调要准

读完题目要求，首先要做到严密审题。分析文章的体裁。因为什么体裁的作文就有什么写作要求和格式，如记叙文、议论文、说明文等，或者是什么应用文（日记、书信、留言条、新闻报道、发言稿等）。体裁明确以后，就要对文章定调，如人称、时态及内容。只要在体裁、题材、人称、时态准确无误的情况下，写出来的作文才不会离题。

二、词汇要美、妙语要多

一份高考作文在阅卷时往往在一分钟之内就能断定生死。大众化词汇、平庸的表达已经使长时间工作的阅卷老师产生了视觉疲劳。如果一篇作文中突然出现几个与众不同、让人眼睛一亮的词汇，老师一定会很大方地给你高分。例如：

1.今年初春我们省大部分地区下了一场大雪。

Early this spring，a heavy snow happened in most parts of our province.

Early this spring，a heavy snow blanketed most parts of our province.

第二句用blanket“席卷”不仅强调了范围，同时形象具体，比第一句更好。

2.请帮助我预定旅馆。

Please help me book a hotel.

Would you please do me a favor to book a hotel？

第二句用了成语do me a favor，同时也有了疑问句，更显得礼貌、委婉、上档次。

3.我的家乡正在修一条新的铁路。

A new railway is being built in my hometown.

A new railway is under construction in my hometown.

第二段使用了介词短语，使句子更高级。

即兴练习：请用其他词汇替换下列各句划线部分。

1.Global warming will surely affect the earth's climate and plants and animals.

Global warming will surely________ ________ ________ ________the earth's climate________ ________ ________plants and animals.

2.On the other side lies another 6-storyed building—our library.

One the other side________another 6-storyed building—our library.

3.He would rather not go to see the film.But he stayed at home，studying.

He would rather not go to see the film.________，he stayed at home，studying.

Key：1.has an effect on；as well as 2.stands 3.Instead

三、句式要变、句子要高

句式单一、缺乏生气的文章，哪怕无任何错误也不可能得高分。写作时应在合适的地方多运用一些复合句、复杂句、固定句型或谚语等，让文章读起来抑扬顿挫、朗朗上口。这样学生深厚的语言功底也得以体现。例如：

1.五点了，我们要走了。

It was five o'clock.We must be off.

How time flies！It was five o'clock.We had to say goodbye.

第二句用了一个感叹句，同时后面还用了词汇had to。句式多变，同时体现了作者依依不舍的心里。

2.快递太快了。我一周内就收到字典了。

The delivery was fast.I received my dictionary within one week.

The delivery was so fast that I received my dictionary within one week.

第二句使用了so...that引导的结果状语从句，比上句更紧凑、大气。

3.当我翻字典时，我发现其中的10页是黑的。

When I looked through the dictionary，I found there were 10 pages which were black.

When looking through the dictionary，I found as many as 10 pages were black.

第一句使用了三个复合句，显得很累赘，而第二句使用了现在分词短语做状语，并与从句中的定语从句也换成了简单句，更显得简洁明快。

即兴练习：请按要求改写下列各句。

1.I was wondering if we could meet at 8：30 outside the school gate.（用if条件句，同时出现convenient）______________________________，let's meet at 8：30 outside the school gate.endprint

2.Our library is in the corner of the school.There is a beautiful garden in front of it and our classroom building behind it.（使用with的复合结构，变成一个复杂句。）

Our library is in the corner of the school，______________________________.

3.It was quite an experience for us both.I will never forget for the rest of my life.（用定语从句）

It was quite an experience for us both，______________________________.

Keys：1.If it is convenient to you

2.with a beautiful garden in front of it and our classroom building behind it.

3.which I'll never forget for the rest of my life.

四、衔接要巧、过渡要妙

文章的另一大亮点是正确使用过渡性词汇及短语，上下句连贯、紧凑，从而使得全文条理清楚，层次分明、论证严密，增加了文章的可读性。

首先请看下面短文：

Yesterday I got up at 7：00.I got dressed and washed myself quickly.I rushed into the kitchen.

My mother was preparing breakfast.I had my breakfast at 7：30.I got on my bike and went to school.

這篇短文“形”是散的，一个个句子如一粒粒珍珠一样，只是松散地放在一起，只有用一条线把这些珍珠串连起来，才能变成一条美丽的项链，那么恰当的过渡性词汇、副词及连词就如这条线一样，是句与句、段与段之间有效连接，给人的感觉就不一样。上段可改为：

Yesterday I got up at 7：00.Then I got dressed and washed myself quickly and rushed into the kitchen，where my mother was preparing breakfast.Later，I had my breakfast at 7：30.After that， I got on my bike and went to school.

通过上面的例子我们可以得出结论：过渡性词汇可以用来对句与句、段与段之间进行自然过渡和连接，它可以使句子结构对称和谐，文章层次分明，逻辑性更加严密，可读性更强。

即兴练习：说出下面此篇文章序号连接词表示的逻辑关系：

Our class had a heated discussion about whether exams are good or bad.The results are①as follows.

Many students think exams are necessary for students.②Firstly，they can tell us how much students have learned and what their strong points and weak points are in their studies.③Therefore，the proper exams are useful to the students' further studies.④In addition，they are also helpful to the teachers.The teachers can get to know clearly what their problems are.⑤So they can get to improve their teaching methods.⑥However，if there are too many exams，they will do more harm than good to the students.The exams will become a heavy burden on the students.⑦Sooner or later the students will get tired of them and lose interest in studying.⑧In a word，⑨in my opinion，exams are necessary，⑩but too many are not good.?Thus.we should reduce unnecessary exams.

Key：

①表示举例、列举；②和⑦表示顺序或次序；③、⑤和?表示因果；④表示递进或强调；⑥和⑩表示转折；⑧表示总结；⑨表示观点

五、检查要细、心中有谱

作文写完后，一定要认真检查一遍，看看有没有要点遗漏或者有无语法、单词拼写错误，或者是否需要改，然后认真誊写在规定的答题卡之内，方可完成。

只要做到以上几点，就可占领作文高分制高点。endprint