My Good Friend

Hello， everyone！ I’m Li Hua. I have a good friend. Her name is ZhangYufei. Yufei is her last name and Zhang is her first name淤. She is 13 years oldnow. She has a happy family. Her father is a cooker于and her mother is ateacher. Her sister is a middle school student. They are in the same school.There are four people in her family. She is a tidy girl. Her room is very tidy.Some books are in the bookcase. A computer is on the desk. She has a clock.It’s on the desk， too. Her pencil box is in the schoolbag. She loves her familyand she loves her room， too.

优点：

本篇习作介绍了朋友的姓名、年龄、家庭、爱好等方面的信息。文章语言简洁，句子结构正确，没有语法错误。文章的结尾表达了对朋友的喜爱，符合初中生的心理特点。

需要修改的地方院

①改为Zhang is her last name and Yufei is her first name.在中文中，姓在前，名在后；在英文中，名在前，姓在后。

②cooker 改为cook。cooker 意为“炊具”，cook 意为“厨师”。

评分院

按中考英语作文满分15 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13 分。