My Day

My name is Xu Yanfeng. I have a busy day every day. I usually get up at sevenoclock and get dressed at ten to seven淤in the morning. Then I brush my teeth andhave the breakfast于. I go to school at seven thirty and I get to school at eightoclock. At half past eight we have our classes. Every day we have six classes.Sometimes I have my lunch at school.

In order to keep healthy， I do exercises盂for half an hour after school in theafternoon， and then I go home. At about half past six， I do my homework. I oftenwatch TV at eight oclock every evening. I go to bed at nine forty in the evening.

This is my day. I have a very healthy life. How about you？

河北省阜城縣第四中学许彦峰

优点：

本文是一篇记叙文。首先，本文以三段式结构安排布局，使文章层次分明。同时，本文巧妙地运用usually、often、sometimes 等频率副词恰当表达了作息习惯。其次，本文以时间为主线，使文章脉络更加清晰。此外，本文的语言表达符合英语习惯，且准确运用了时态、主谓一致等语法知识。总之，这是一篇值得推荐的优秀习作。

需要修改的地方：

①ten to seven 改为ten past ten。根据前文可知，“穿好衣服”时间应为“七点十分”。

②去掉the。英语表三餐的单词前面不使用冠词。

③exercises 改为exercise。exercise 作“运动、锻炼”时，是不可数名词。

评分：

按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17 分。

本期点评名师

张超男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作30 多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。