Pop Music

Pop Music

Do you like pop music？ I like it very much. Which pop star do you like best？ I like Jay Chou. Though he is not handsome， but① he sings very well. I think he is one of the best singers in China.

Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well， so I dont like them. If a singer sings very well， he or she will have a lot of fans， even though he or she is not good-looking. If a singer sings well and has a good look at same② time， it will be perfect. He or she must be loved by his or her fans. Such singers are： Wang Fei， Liu Dehua， Zhou Huajian， Wang Lihong， Song Zuying and so on.

Pop music is popular between③ young people all over the world. It can make you feel light-hearted and comfortable. It can even make you forget your sadness， worries and troubles. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a happy life.

山东省梁山县杨营中学初一（3）班  王贞贞

1. 优点：

本文结构严谨，层次分明，过渡自然。该文章写的是小作者对流行音乐的喜爱，并对流行音乐歌手的相貌和水平表达了自己的看法，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① 去掉but。but 和though不可以出现在同一句话中;

② 加上the。at the same time表示“同时”;

③ between 改为among。在这里表示三者及以上的要用among，两者之中才用between;

④ to改为for。be good for意思是“对……有好处”。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。