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情境呈现
假定你的老师让你在班级分享自己的健康报告,请你按以下要点写一篇80词左右的文章。内容包括:
1. 过去——身体虚弱,经常感冒;
2. 现在——养成早起锻炼的好习惯,悦纳自己;
3. 结果及感想。
写作指导
Step 1 文体感知
学生可以在健康报告中交流关于健康生活的心得体会。写作时,可以从“锻炼(exercise)、减压(reduce stress)、自信(selfconfidence)及健康饮食(healthy eating)”等方面入手,也可以从自己或他人的过去与现在的对比入手。总之,写健康报告的目的就是唤醒他人或自己对健康的认知,从而建立起健康的生活模式。
Step 2 谋篇布局
Step 3 语言组织
词块积累
healthy/fit 健康的
unhealthy/unfit 不健康的
green food 绿色食品
healthy diet 健康饮食
good living habits 好的生活习惯
overweight 肥胖
lose weight 减重
enough sleep 充足的睡眠
build up oneself 强身健体
go on a diet 节食
form a healthy eating habit 养成一个健康的饮食习惯
be in poor health 不健康
be good for one s health 对某人的健康有益
句子积累
1. I d like to share my ideas involving how to keep healthy physically and mentally. 我想分享一下我关于如何保持身心健康的想法。
2. We are doing sports to keep healthy. 我们进行体育运动是为了保持健康。
3. I worried about my weight and tried every new diet I read about online. 我担心自己的体重,并尝试了我在网上读到的每一种新的饮食方法。
4. I almost went bananas. 我快要发疯了。
5. Once I started thinking about health rather than weight, things began to change. 一旦我开始考虑健康问题而不是体重问题,事情就开始改变了。
6. Rather than cutting out the foods I enjoyed, I added healthy foods to my meals. 我并没有减少我喜欢的食物,而是在我的食物中添加了健康的食物。
7. Taking exercise does make a difference! 锻炼确实会有很大的作用!
8. I want to be able to do 30 pushups every day. 我想每天都能做30个俯卧撑。
9. Stop comparing yourself with actresses and models. 不要再把自己與女演员和模特做比较了。
10. By being positive about myself and my body, I became both happier and healthier. 通过悦纳自己和自己的身体,我变得更快乐、更健康。
过渡语
as a result 结果
instead 反而
however 然而
after that 在那之后
what s more 而且
then 然后
now 现在
佳作欣赏
When I was young, I was so weak that I caught a cold now and then. As a result, it was difficult for me to go to school like other children.
Then I read an article that said jogging in the morning would make a difference to health. In order to change myself, I follow the advice and do it every day. After that, I form the habit of getting up early and jogging for half an hour. What s more, I am more positive about myself and my body.
Now, my body is building up by working out every day, which is good for my daily life.
即時训练
你所在的班级即将举行健康报告分享活动,请根据以下要点写一篇80词左右的文章。
1. 以前:吃垃圾食品,不锻炼;
2. 现在:平衡膳食,坚持锻炼;
3. 你的体会。