江苏省兴化市大垛中心校 九年级(2)班 吴 俊
In the past,I hated exercise.My mother often advised me to do some sports.But I didn't agree.I thought it troubled to do sports every day and it was very difficult for me to do some sports.So I was very weak and I often got ill.I also got fatter and fatter.
I wanted to improve this situation.So I tried to do sports every day.It often took me one and a half hours to do sports every day.
As the saying goes“Reading is to the mind while exercise to the body.”So my body is getting more and more healthy(healthier and healthier).
Now I love sports very much and I am very strong.I seldom have a cold and I am not fat any more.I am also much strength(stronger).
“Life lies in movement.”I hope everyone can learn from me.Do exercise every day.I believe everyone can be stronger and stronger.
【习作点评】
这是一篇介绍运动和健康的习作。
全文主题突出,结构合理,详略得当。advised、agree、improve、seldom等词语及宾语从句、并列句、谚语等的运用,增强了文章的色彩。但如将文中的more and more healthy改为healthier and healthier,strength 改 为stronger,表达会更加恰当。