广州市越秀区育才实验学校学生优秀作文展

广州市越秀区育才实验学校学生优秀作文展

现在很多学校都要求学生穿校服以便于管理，但对此同学们意见不一。有的同学支持，有的同学反对。请你根据以下提示写一篇短文发表一下你的意见。

有的同学认为：

1. 校服较为舒适，适合运动；

2. 校服显示了学生良好的纪律（discipline）；

3. 校服让学生在遇到困难时可以很快得到帮助。

有的同学认为：

1. 校服比较单调，不够时尚；

2. 校服价格偏高，有些校服的质量也不好；

3. 家里衣服已经很多，没必要再增加多余的衣服。

你的建议或意见 ……

作文要求：

1. 词数80～100左右；

2. 准确表达出表格中的内容，要有自己的见解。

Many schools ask students to buy school uniforms.

初三（2）班●石慧熙

Many schools ask students to buy school uniforms. It is convenient for schools to manage if students wear school uniforms. However， students have different ideas.

Some students agree on buying uniforms for some reasons. Firstly，uniforms are not only comfortable but also suitable for various kinds of sports. Secondly， students can show their excellent discipline by wearing uniforms. Further more， uniforms can obviously make the students who are in trouble get help quickly.

However， some students are against buying uniforms. They think uniforms are boring and unfashionable. Besides that， the quality of some uniforms isn’t good， which is not worth the high price. Above all， it is unnecessary for the students who have plenty of clothes at home to buy extra ones.

In my point of view， I hope schools can allow students to design the uniforms so that there will be no argument about uniforms any more.

朱枫老师点评：本篇作文结构清晰，开头总起说明学校要求学生穿校服的目的，接着分述支持的与不支持的同学的观点，最后发表了自己的建议和看法。全文过渡自然，使用了很多连接词，如however、above all和besides that等。文中的简单句、并列句与复合句并用，也是一大亮点。不仅有it is...to do...，so that...，not only...but also这样常用的句型和结构，也有像“the quality of some uniforms isn’t good， which is not worth the high price”这样的定语从句。

初三（2）班●崔静

Many schools ask students to buy school uniforms. However， students share different opinions on this matter.

On the one hand， some students think that uniforms are comfortable to wear and suitable for sports. They show the great discipline among students. What’s more， when a student who wears uniform is in trouble， he may get help from others more quickly and can be found more easily.

On the other hand， others think that uniforms are pretty ordinary and lack of fashion. The price is not always reasonable while some of them are still of poor quality. Since students have plenty of clothes at home， there is no need for more.

In my point of view， uniforms carry our memories as students. They represent the intrinsic spirit of a school. So I am willing to buy the uniforms.

朱枫老师点评：本篇作文语言简洁，要点齐全，行文流畅。文中be of poor quality、price is not reasonable等要点的表达准确而新颖。在最后一段中，作者表达出了内心对校服的真实看法，字里行间流露出真情实感。

初三（2）班●蒋沛霖

Many schools ask students to buy school uniforms. Some students suppose that school uniforms are comfortable to wear and suitable for exercise. And the uniforms show great discipline. Most importantly， if a student wears school uniform， he will be found easily and can get help from others soon when he is in trouble.

However， other students don’t think so. They think that the types of school uniforms are too simple. This makes them boring and not fashionable. The price of them is quite high while the quality is not good. What’s more， students think it’s not necessary to buy more clothes as they have had a lot at home.

In my opinion， I suggest schools should listen to students’ ideas. So why not design a kind of school uniform that is comfortable， fashionable and affordable？

朱枫老师点评：本篇作文结构合理，句式多样，过渡自然。不同句型的使用避免了句式的单调性，使文章的表达更加饱满，例如It is not necessary to...，I suggest that...等句式，以及if、while等引导的状语从句。另外，小作者在结尾处使用“why not...？”的句型进行设问，能够

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