Dalian

李永航

Do you know Dalian？ I think Dalian is one of the most beautiful cities in China. Its hotter than my hometown in summer. There are many trees and mountains around the city. The people in Dalian are very friendly and the food is more expensive than my hometowns.

My favorite place is Xinghai park. It is said that its the biggest park in Asian. There are many kinds of birds in this park. And the large sea is very beautiful. Some people can swim in the sea， others can discover many interesting things on the beach， such as stones， fish... In my opinion， Dalian is not only a beautiful city， but also is a young city full of vitality. I love Dalian. Its the best place that I have ever been to.

简评：从作文中能够感受到学生对大连的喜爱。首先写了对大连的整体感受，然后又写了最喜欢的星海公园。具有较强的语言表达能力；行文连贯，表达清晰明了，可读性强，但是如果能把对大连的感受具体分类，会更好。

（ 指导教师：董文平）