过年了

●春节即将来临，请给你在美国的笔友写一封信，谈论此时此刻你和家人是如何为春节做准备的。要求：①写出本人的真情实感。②80~100词左右。

Dear Arnold,

How is life?

Im so excited at the moment because the Spring Festival is coming. That is a tradition day for the Chinese people get together. Its Chinas New Years Day. And now my family is geting ready for it!

My grandfather is making paper cuts and decorate the doors and windows with paper cuts. My grandma is sweeping the floor and clean the room. I know she wants to sweep away bad luck. What am I doing? I am making some little lanterns and color them now. And Im thinking about writing and sending some postcards and e-mails to my good friends.

Oh,What smells delicious! Yes, my mother is cooking the meal for New Year' Eve. She is singing and cooking. “My family will get together eating, talking and watching TV. Im enjoying everything!”How funny my mother is!

Tell me about a festival in your country.

Best wishes，

Love from,

Kan Hongrui

点评：首先， How is life 这句话用得不够地道，作者原意是想说一句问候语，询问对方过得怎么样，更为常用、地道的句子应该是 How is everything going; tradition意为“传统”，这里修饰后面的名词day，应用形容词形式traditional；作者想表达“那是中国人团聚的传统日子”，但在本句中，已经有了一个动词做谓语，如果再有其他动词就要使用非谓语动词，所以这里的get 要用其不定式形式to get 来表达；family 这个词要注意，它在此处应为“家里人”的意思，而不是“家庭”的意思，所以它此时是一个集体名词，本身具有复数概念，所以be动词要用复数形式，另外，get 的现在分词形式应该双写t加ing；当由and来连接两个并列动词时，这两个动词在时态和形式上要一致，如信中的make和decorate，sweep 和clean，make 和color。She is singing and cooking这一句，作者想表达“妈妈准备春节大餐时，一边做饭一边唱歌”的喜悦心情，但是这个句子却并没有表达出这样的意思，那么，“一边……一边……”该如何表达呢？我们可以运用连词as 来表达：She is singing happily as she is cooking；最后，作者想写妈妈是个很有趣的人，用了funny 这个词，不够恰当，因为funny这个词的意思是“逗人发笑，行为滑稽可笑”，而“有趣的，令人愉快的”应该用形容词fun，此处的感叹句用得就不错，给文章增色不少。

修改后的作文：

Dear Arnold,

How is everything going?

Im so excited at the moment because the Spring Festival is coming. That is a traditional day for the Chinese people to get together. Its Chinas New Years Day. And now my family are getting ready for it!

My grandfather is making paper cuts and decorating the doors and windows with paper cuts. My grandma is sweeping the floor and cleaning the room. I know she wants to sweep away bad luck. What am I doing? I am making some little lanterns and coloring them now. And Im thinking about writing and sending some postcards and e-mails to my good friends.

Oh, What smells delicious! Yes, my mother is cooking the meal for New Year Eve. She is singing happily as she is cooking. “My family will get together eating, talking and watching TV. Im enjoying everything!” How fun my mother is!

Tell me about a festival in your country.

Best wishes，

Love from,

Kan Hongrui