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随着2008年奥运会的日益临近，如何度过奥运会举办的日子成了广大中学生议论的话题。阅读下表内容，写一篇短文，介绍一下你将如何度过奥运会举办的日子。

学习习作(王寰 呼和特市第十四中学高二•六班)

Now the 2008 Olympic Games are around the corner. How to spend the days when the Olympic Games are held? Here is my plan to① it.

First, if possible, I will try to watch the live broadcasts of some events that I like mostly②, such as table tennis matches, football matches and swimming competitions. Besides, I also will③know about the results of other events with④ watching some introduction programmes.

So as to⑤ treasure the information about the performance of the Chinese athletes, I will type all the grades of them into my computer. In addition, I will offer to introduce the development of the 2008 Olympic Games and how the Chinese athletes try to win medals to my parents, my neighbours and other citizens. At the same time, I will write articles for our school newspaper in praise for⑥ all the athletes for they struggle⑦ to win medals.

修改说明：①“……的计划”应表达为…plan for，因此to应改为for。 ②“最喜欢……”应表达为like…most，因此mostly应改为most。③also应放在助动词后面，所以also will应改为will also。④此处表示通过抽象手段，因此with应改为by。⑤So as to不可置于句首，因此应改为In order to。⑥“赞扬……”应表达为in praise of，因此for应改为of。⑦for为介词，后面应接动名词，因此they struggle应改为their struggling。

点评：本篇书面表达习作为未来计划介绍文。小作者根据写作要求从观看奥运会直播节目、记录中国运动员比赛情况、宣传奥运会有关内容等角度表达文意，文章要点齐全，内容完整，条理清楚，层次分明，整体美感较强。First, Besides, In addition, At the same time等过渡性词汇的使用使文章叙述更全面、行文更连贯、逻辑更严密。定语从句、条件状语从句、such as列举句型等高级表达方式的运用使文章表达手段更多，表达效果更好，有力提升了文章的表达档次。然而美中不足的是，本文存在一些语言表达方面的错误，如介词错误、易混词误用错误、词序错误、易混短语误用错误、短语搭配错误、非谓语动词错误，表明作者表达能力还有较大的上升空间。不过，从总体上讲，本文仍属一篇成功之作，值得广大读者借鉴。

范文：Now the 2008 Olympic Games are around the corner. How to spend the days when the Olympic Games are held? Here is my plan for it.

First, if possible, I will try to watch the live broadcasts of some events that I like most, such as table tennis matches, football matches and swimming competitions. Besides, I will also know about the results of other events by watching some introduction programmes.

In order to treasure the information about the performance of the Chinese athletes, I will type all the grades of them into my computer. In addition, I will offer to introduce the development of the 2008 Olympic Games and how the Chinese athletes try to win medals to my parents, my neighbours and other citizens. At the same time, I will write articles for our school newspaper in praise of all the athletes for their struggling to win medals.