2023年12月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（二）

四级

Directions： Suppose the university newspaper is inviting submissions from the students for its coming edition on what in their university impresses them most. You are now to write an essay for submission. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道大学英语四级作文试题假设校报邀请学生们投稿，内容是大学里什么给他们留下最深印象。大学给学生留下最深印象的有很多方面，既可以是具体的，比如美丽的校园、富有朝气的学生和丰富多彩的社团活动等；也可以是抽象的，比如悠久的历史、优良的校风和积极进取的精神风貌等。由于题目中的impresses用的是单数形式，考生宜仅从一个方面来写。

本文可以写三个段落。

第一段指出自己是上海理工大学的一名大一新生，大学给自己留下最深印象的是它位于黄浦江畔的美丽校园。

第二段介绍给自己留下深刻印象的校园美景。我们不妨从以下几个方面依次展开。首先，由于这所大学可以追溯到创建于1906年的沪江大学，校园里有六七座哥特风格的历史建筑，它们讲述着这所著名学府的传奇往事；校园里还点缀着几座雅致的别墅，周围樱花树环绕，每到春天樱花盛开。其次，校园里的建筑红砖黛瓦，道路两边排列着参天大树，构成美丽的风景。除此之外，由于其独特的位置，这所大学还有其他大学所没有的景色：黄浦江上往来的船只。

第三段先总结全文，先指出这座以哥特式建筑、林荫道和樱花而著称的校园在都市的喧嚣中为学生提供了一片绿洲，然后感叹自己很幸运能在这样美丽的校园里度过大学时光。

下面请看参考范文：

As a freshman of the University of Shanghai for Science and Technology， I am most impressed by its beautiful campus， which is located on the Huangpu River.

The university dates back to Shanghai College founded in 1906， so its campus is home to half a dozen historic buildings of Gothic style， which tell of the storied past of this famed university. The campus is also dotted with several elegant villas， surrounded by cherry trees that blossom brilliantly in spring. The buildings here are built of red bricks and black tiles and the pathways are lined with towering trees， making a beautiful sight. On top of that， the university， due to its unique situation， commands a view other schools don’t have： ships of all sizes and shapes sailing on the Huangpu River.

Known for its Gothic architecture， tree-lined paths and cherry blossoms， the campus of my university offers us students an oasis amongst the hustle and bustle of downtown Shanghai. I am dead lucky to spend my college days on such a beautiful campus. （172 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. The university dates back to Shanghai College founded in 1906， so its campus is home to half a dozen historic buildings of Gothic style， which tell of the storied past of this famed university. 这所大学的历史可以追溯到创建于1906年的沪江大学，所以校园里有六七座哥特风格的历史建筑，它们讲述着这所著名学府的传奇往事。be home to （某处）有。storied 广为流传的。

2. On top of that， the university， due to its unique situation， commands a view other universities don’t have： ships of all sizes and shapes sailing on the Huangpu River. 除此之外，由于其独特的位置，这所大学还有其他学校所没有的景色：黄浦江上航行的各种大小和形状的船只。situation 位置。command 拥有。

3. Known for its Gothic architecture， tree-lined paths and cherry blossoms， the campus of my university offers us students an oasis amongst the hustle and bustle of downtown Shanghai. 我的大学校园以哥特式建筑、林荫道和樱花而著称，它在上海的都市喧嚣中为我们学生提供了一片绿洲。hustle and bustle 喧嚣。

4. I am dead lucky to spend my college days on such a beautiful campus. 我真是太幸运了，能在这样美丽的校园里度过大学时光。dead 非常。例如：You were dead lucky to get that job. 你得到那份工作，真是太幸运了。

六级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “As is known to all， gaining a sound knowledge of the basics is of vital importance for students to master an academic subject.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words （not including the sentence given）.

这道大学英语六级作文试题属于阐释观点型。此类型题目的特点是提出一个观点，要求考生论证这个观点的正确性。这道题要求考生论证的观点是，获得扎实的基础知识对掌握一门学科至关重要。我们在审题时要善于透过复杂的表述抓住题目的关键。这道题目的关键是论述掌握扎实的基础知识的重要性。

本文可以写三个段落。

第一段先提出论点：获得扎实的基础知识对掌握一门学科至关重要，然后引用专家的意见支撑这个观点。此为破题。

第二段论证为什么获得扎实的基础知识对掌握一门学科至关重要，即论证掌握扎实的基础知识的重要性。我们在论证一个道理时，不妨“虚则实之”，即举出具体的例子来证明抽象的观点。我们可以先以数学为例：你需要先理解了代数、几何和三角的基础知识，才能继续学习高深的内容。接着我们再以学习演奏乐器为例进行类比论证：要精湛地演奏一种乐器，你必须先牢固地掌握基本技能。为了增强说服力，我们再从反面进行论证：如果忽视了掌握基础知识的重要性，你可能就难以理解高深的知识和技能。

本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先总结上文，指出复杂的理论和概念是建立在基础知识之上的，然后建议大学生投入时间和精力打牢基础，以便于掌握一门学科。

下面请看参考范文：

As is known to all， gaining a sound knowledge of the basics is of vital importance for students to master an academic subject. In actual fact， many experts believe that the key to success in any field is a deep understanding of the basics.

Basic knowledge is the foundation on which more complex ideas are built. So having a good command of the basics is a prerequisite for mastering an academic subject. Let’s take mathematics as an example. It is necessary for you to first understand the basics of algebra， geometry， and trigonometry before moving on to more advanced topics. In the same way， to be an accomplished player of a musical instrument， you have to gain a complete mastery of basic skills. Conversely， if you overlook the importance of mastering the fundamentals， you may struggle to understand advanced materials or skills.

Basics are the building blocks upon which more complex theories and concepts are constructed. Therefore it is advised that college students invest time and effort in laying a solid foundation so as to master an academic subject. （179 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. In actual fact， many experts believe that the key to success in any field is a deep understanding of the basics. 确切地说，许多专家认为在任何领域获得成功的关键就是深入理解基础知识。in actual fact确切地说。这个短语可用来补充说明或强调前面所说的话。

2. Let’s take mathematics as an example. 让我们以数学为例吧。这是举例论证的一个常用句型。

3. Conversely， if you overlook the importance of mastering the fundamentals， you may struggle to understand advanced materials or skills. 反过来，如果你忽视了掌握基础知识的重要性，你可能难以理解高深的知识和技能。conversely 相反地，反过来。这是一个作正反论证的常用过渡语。fundamentals 基本知识。struggle to do sth 难以做某事。

4. Therefore it is advised that college students invest time and effort in laying a solid foundation so as to master an academic subject. 因此建议大学生投入时间和精力夯实基础，以便于掌握一门学科。it is advised that… 是一个提建议的常用句型。lay a solid foundation 夯实基础。

* 上海外国语大学国际新闻硕士，讲师，专注大学英语写作教学十余年。