My School Life

My name is Shen Yifan. I’m in No. 4 Middle School. I love my school verymuch， because our school life is color淤. There are many clubs in the school， suchas drawing club， singing club， dancing club， piano club， English club， readingclub and many kinds of sport于club. We can choose the clubs which we areinterested盂. I joined the English club last year， because I like English so much. Iusually go to the club on Monday and Friday in our school library. I really learna lot of榆from the English club. Now I am good at English very much and I canspeak English fluently.

This is my school life and I enjoy it very much.

河北省阜城县第四中学 沈一凡

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①color 改为colorful。be 动词后的表语用形容词。

②sport 改为sports。名词sport 用作定语时通常使用复数形式。

③interested 后面加in。be interested in 是固定短语，意为“对……感兴趣”。

④去掉of。a lot 在此用作及物动词learn 的宾语。

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按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17 分。