2023 年高考读后续写考查方向预测

闫晓燕

（山东省蓬莱第二中学）

新高考在山东省已经实行三年了。2020 年全国新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写考查的主题语境是人与社会，kindness 话题。所给文本讲述的是Meredith一家帮助Bernard 赚钱补贴家用的故事；2021 年考查的主题语境是人与社会，family love 话题。所给文本讲述的是一对双胞胎在母亲节的早晨在爸爸的帮助下为母亲做早餐。2022 年考查的主题语境是人与自我，personal growth 话题。所给文本讲述了患有脑疾的少年David 战胜自我参加赛跑的故事。这三年没有考过脱险和人与动物的话题。另外，人与自我主题语境中，青少年的个人成长话题包括的角度很多，是读后续写考查的重点。基于多年教学经验和对历年高考题的研究，笔者大胆预测，2023 年高考英语全国新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写考查这两个方向的话题可能性较大。所以，笔者选择了以下两篇文章。第一篇是小猫帮助主人脱险。第二篇是关于诚实的个人成长话题。

（一）

The Christmas holidays were fast approaching,and we had ordered many gifts online.So,when the doorbell rang,I was sure some of the packages had arrived.I ran to the door and swung it open,but no one was there.I sensed something and looked down,only to find a beautiful calico kitte（杂色猫）sitting there,looking up at me with big,intelligent eyes.There was no way that she could have rung the doorbell by herself,was there?

We figured that someone had found the kitten somewhere and left her there,and then the person rang the doorbell and ran away.They accurately guessed we would welcome an additional family member and take care of her.

My husband called her our little angel,so we named her Angelica accordingly.She had a calm aura（气质）about her as she walked straight into our home and hearts,fitting in perfectly.It seemed as if she was always meant to be in this big house with us.She was an old soul and turned out to be the perfect companion.Always by my side,she was more like a puppy than a kitten.Wise beyond her years,she enjoyed wandering through the tunnels and mysterious rooms as much as I did,but with much less fear.Angelica the calico was courageous.

So,I learned from her and decided to be brave,too.There was an underground stone cellar（地窖）I had been eager to explore.The only way in was down a rickety（摇晃的）ladder to its dark depths.I guessed it was an old root cellar,probably twelve feet deep.

I had promised my husband that I wouldn’t explore dangerous areas unless he or someone else was around.Though I knew I was sort of afraid,I figured thatAngelica would count as my companion.I was ready to explore this cellar,and so was she.

I equipped myself with a good flashlight and warm clothes and carefully started down the rickety ladder while Angelica was looking down at me from above.Suddenly,something unexpected happened.Faint cracks and a sudden crash were what I could remember.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150 左右；

2.请按如下格式作答。

Paragraph 1:I woke up with pieces of the rotting,broken ladder lying around me on the stone cellar flo or._________________________________________

Paragraph 2:It seemed my companion,Angelica,was my last hope._____________________________

文本分析：

本篇故事主题语境为人与自然。故事主要内容为：“我们”捡到了一只杂色猫，它聪明，可爱，爱探险。“我们”把它看作最好的伙伴。在它的影响下，“我”冒险去了丈夫一直不准“我”去的地窖。结果，“我”摔进了地窖。最终在小猫的帮助下，“我”脱离了困境。文章第四段提到了地窖可能有12 英尺深。所以，在续写内容中，“我”很有可能受伤了。所给文本的最后一段提到“我”带着手电筒，穿着暖和的衣服，而Angelica 则在上面看着“我”。所以，在续写的文章中，手电筒可能好用，但也有可能摔坏了。第一段的情节可以这样设计：根据第一段的段首句“我”醒来只看到了石地板上的梯子的零散碎块，说明“我”摔下来之后晕过去了。所以，醒来后，“我”的反应是想要爬起来，却发现自己受伤了。而在第二段段首句，似乎Angelica 是“我”最后的希望，此句暗示在续写的第一段，“我”努力自救，但失败了。而在最绝望的时刻，“我”看到、听到或想到了Angelica，这样就可以顺利衔接到第二段。第二段的情节可以按以下思路设计：第二段的结尾应该是“我”被及时救出来，所以第二段的开头衔接的是“我”想办法让Angelica 去找人帮忙。而Angelica 走了之后，“我”焦急地等待，不知结果如何。当获救之后，回扣主题——Angelica 是“我们”最好的伙伴。

参考范文：

Paragraph 1:I woke up with pieces of the rotting,broken ladder lying around me on the stone cellar floor.An acute pain tearing me into pieces,I struggled to my feet and glanced at the remote ray of light with frustration.Learning that I had to get out of the twelve-foot-deep cellar by myself,I grabbed the bump on the wall and started to climb up.The broken flashlight on the ground witnessed my vain attempts to escape from the situation.Eventually,I collapsed onto the ground,trembling helplessly.Suddenly,a faint meow came into my ears.It was my little angel,with its calm aura as usual！

Paragraph 2:It seemed my companion,Angelica,was my last hope.“Angelica,go and find Dad!”I cried with all my strength.Eyeing me with its intelligent eyes for a moment,the calico kitten ran away.Staring at the entrance,I couldn’t help wondering whether she went to seek help or just to play.My only hope of survival dimmed gradually.After what seemed to be centuries,hurried footsteps broke the dead silence.It was my intelligent companion that found my husband to rescue me!Having left the dark cellar,I lifted my little angel,Angelica,up,murmuring my heartfelt gratitude.Undoubtedly,it was a blessing to have met such a perfect companion in the cold winter!

范文分析：

动作线：挣扎着站起来，了解形势—试图爬出地窖—失败后崩溃地瘫坐在地上—看到Angelica并求救— Angelica 离开后焦急地等待—获救。

情感线：刚开始的沮丧—自救失败时的崩溃—看到Angelica 时产生一丝希望—等待中的焦急—获救后的感激。

在语言方面：在范文第一段的段首句衔接，用acute,tear...into pieces,struggle 来体现“我”受伤的情况，remote ray of light 烘托出“我”渴望逃出去但又希望渺茫的困境；而collapse onto the ground,dead silence 则体现出我的绝望；the twelvefoot-deep cellar,the broken flashlight,intelligent companion,tremble,its calm aura,angel,很好地与原文形成了内容上的有效衔接和呼应。在语法方面：An acute pain tearing me into pieces,使用了独立主格结构；The broken flashlight on the ground witnessed...使用了高级语法无灵主语；It was...that...强调句式；...whether she went...，after what seemed to be centuries 宾语从句，after what seemed to be centuries 宾语从句。eventually,suddenly,after what seemed to be centuries,undoubtedly,having left...起到了很好的衔接作用。

（二）

以下这篇文章的主题语境为人与自我，关注青少年的个人成长。

An honest mistake

Karie double-checked the words on her spelling test.If she got full marks today,she’d win her class’s First-Quarter Spelling Challenge and a brand new dictionary.Plus,Ms.McCormack had promised to do a handstand if anyone got a perfect score.

Three more words to go.N-i-c-e-l-y.Q-u-i-c-kl-y.H-o-n-e-s-t-y.Wait! She’d spelled “honesty”,not“honestly”.She hurriedly erased the t-y and wrote l-y before handing in her paper.

Ms.McCormack graded the test papers during the break.Meanwhile,Karie sat restlessly in her seat with her fingers crossed.Then,Ms.McCormack walked to the front of the class and cleared her throat.As if she were an Olympic gymnast,Ms.McCormack’s feet flipped（空翻）into the air.

“Congratulations,Karie! You did it!”she announced while upside down.

The whole class broke into applause! Ms.McCormack righted herself and presented Karie with her prize.Karie grinned as she read the label on the box:

To Karie Carter,for her perfect first-quarter score in spelling.

“Is everything OK?”Mom asked as Karie burst through the front door after school.Karie didn’t answer.As if by magic,she took out her spelling test paper and prize and showed them to her mother.Mom hugged her,asking her to put the test paper on the fridge so that Dad could see it when he got home.

Karie took another look at the test paper before putting it on the fridge.Her hands stopped in mid-air.She just couldn’t believe her eyes.“Honesly”?

YES! H-O-N-E-S-L-Y!

Mom sensed something unusual and asked why.Karie stuffed the test paper into her backpack and explained that she was just too excited.Mom brought her some tea.Yes,a“t”was exactly what she needed.

After drinking a little,Karie plodded（沉重缓慢地走）down the hall,lost in thought.How could she tell the class she hadn’t earned the prize and that Ms.McCormack did the handstand for nothing?

注意：

1.续写词数应为150 左右；

2.请按如下格式作答。

Paragraph 1:Later Dad came in with excitement.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2:The next morning,Karie went to school earlier than usual.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

文本分析：

本篇故事主题语境为人与自我。故事主要内容为Karie 通过努力获得了拼写比赛的第一名，得到了奖品。但是当Karie 回到家以后，却发现单词“honestly”拼错了，意味着她并不是真正的第一名。该如何处理这个问题？Karie 心情沉重地走着，陷入了沉思。这时候父亲开心地走了进来……故事的结局一定是Karie 告诉老师实情，体现honesty的美好品质。第一段的情节可以这样设计：根据段首句关键词with excitement 得知，父亲可能已经知道她得到第一名的消息，所以接下来可以通过动作和情感来体现父亲的开心。相对于父亲的开心，Karie 的内心在纠结到底该不该说出实情。根据第二段段首句的关键词went to school earlier than usual，得知Karie 一定是下定决心要向老师坦白。所以，在父亲发现Karie 的不对劲的时候，Karie 告诉父亲实情，并得到父亲的鼓励和支持。第二段段首句同时也提到the next morning，可以在第一段添加细节，Karie 一夜无眠。第二段的情节可以按以下思路设计：Karie 比平时早到学校，说明她想单独跟老师谈这件事情，而不想在同学们面前承认这个问题，所以，在第二段没有必要提到同学们。第二段要以honesty 主题结尾，所以第二段主要是关于Karie 与老师的互动。Karie 进办公室之前的紧张可通过动作描写体现出来，也可以写Karie 勇敢承认问题之后老师的反应。最后，回扣主题——honesty 可贵的品质。

参考范文：

Paragraph 1:Later Dad came in with excitement.Eyeing his beloved daughter tenderly,he praised Karie for her perfect performance.Feeling desperately guilty,the girl was at a loss what to do.Whether to speak out the truth or keep it to herself,the two opposite sounds interwove inside her mind.Eventually,she convinced herself to confess the truth.Having heard about the situation,Dad smiled encouragingly,“Whatever decision you make,we will always be on your side,my dear.”That night was sure to be restless.The anxious winner tossed and turned,and finally made up her mind

Paragraph 2:The next morning,Karie went to school earlier than usual.With the test paper and new dictionary clutched tightly in her hands,the nervous girl plodded into the office.Having explained that she had misspelt the word“honestly”,Karie placed the prize on the desk cautiously.After seconds of silence,Ms.McCormack reached out for the prize,tore off the label and replaced it with one written“To Karie Carter,for her great virtue”on it.Seeing those words of recognition,Karie said goodbye to her teacher cheerfully and sprang out of the office,proud to have confessed the truth.That day,it dawned on her that“Honesty is the best policy”.

范文分析：

动作线：爸爸表扬Karie—Karie 纠结该怎么办—Karie 坦白实情—父亲鼓励—Karie 一夜无眠—Karie 走进办公室坦白—Ms.McCormack 认可Karie 的做法。

情感线：Karie 进退维谷，内疚一夜的焦虑—坦白问题的紧张—被老师认可后的开心。

在语言方面：desperately guilty,at a loss,whether...or...,the two opposite sounds interwove inside her mind 体现了Karie 内心的纠结。his beloved daughter，my dear 和the nervous girl，以及 speak out the truth 和confess the truth，体现语言的多种表达。语法方面：使用了状语从句、非谓语、形容词短语作状语等。在写作手法方面：After seconds of silence,Ms.McCormack reached out for the prize,tore off the label and replaced it with one written“To Karie Carter,for her great virtue”on it.运用了动作链。plodded into the office 与sprang out of the office 通过动作描写体现出情感的对比和发展。To Karie Carter,for her great virtue 在情节上很好地与原文的label：To Karie Carter,for her perfect first-quarter score in spelling.形成了内容上的呼应，也实现了故事情节上的发展，回扣主题。另外，长短句结合，有效地避免句子的冗长。在衔接方面：eventually,having explained that ...,after seconds of silence,those words of recognition,that day，使文章更加连贯。

相比第一年的帮助邻居和第二年的母亲节做早餐，第三年的David 参加跑赛更需要学生关注文本中的描写David 的语句，推断David 的性格特征和行为。学生基本都能推断出David 参加了比赛，但是很多学生没有关注到原文的“he always finished his run long after the other children”，在续写的结尾时设计的情节是David 获得了第一名。今年是山东省新高考的第四年，读后续写考查的深度和广度会加大，对学生的能力要求也会更高。希望笔者所选的两篇文章能起到抛砖引玉的作用。