2022年6月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（三）

贾从永

四级

Directions： Suppose you are writing a proposal to your Students Union for enriching students’ extracurricular activities. You are to write about what activities to organize and why. You will have 30 minutes to write the proposal. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道2022年6月的大学英语四级作文试题要求考生给学生会写一份关于丰富学生课外活动的建议书，内容是指出学生会应该组织哪些课外活动并说明理由。

建议书是应用文的一种，一般包括四个部分：标题、称呼、正文、署名。本文的标题可以写A Proposal for Enriching Students’ Extracurricular Activities。称呼可以写Dear Chairman。

正文可以写三个段落。

第一段首先表明自己的身份，然后说明写作目的——为丰富学生的课外活动而提出建议。

第二段指出学生会应该组织哪些课外活动并说明理由。大学的课外活动多种多样，考生在这一部分可以根据自己的知识储备自由发挥，最好从两三个方面展开，并且每指出一项课外活动，紧接着就说明理由。比如，学生会可以在校园里组建音乐、舞蹈、戏剧、艺术等社团，因为这些社团可以给学生机会去探索自己的爱好，还可以让学生通过在自己喜欢的社团里表现自我而变得更加自信。除此之外，学生会还可以组建各种体育运动队。加入运动队不但能改善学生的体质，还有助于他们培养一些人生技能，比如团队协作能力。此外，学生们还能在锻炼的时候结识志同道合的朋友。

第三段先指出学生参加课外活动的重要意义，然后表明希望学生会采取有效措施，以确保学生的课外活动丰富多彩。

最后是署名，写在正文之下中间偏右的位置，可以写Li Ming。

下面请看参考范文：

A Proposal for Enriching Students’ Extracurricular Activities

Dear Chairman，

I am a junior of Shanghai University. I am writing to put forward a proposal to enrich the students’ extracurricular activities.

Students Union may consider organizing various societies on campus， such as music， dance， drama and arts clubs. These clubs will offer students the opportunity to explore their passions. Students will also become more confident by expressing themselves in clubs of their interest. Sports are equally important. A variety of sports teams， such as basketball， football， aerobics and swimming teams， can be created. Joining these teams will not only improve the students’ health condition but help develop such life skills as teamwork in students. Besides， students will meet like-minded peers and make new friends while working out.

Taking part in extracurricular activities is an integral part of school experience. Apart from providing them with a break from regular classes， it helps students develop into all-rounded individuals. I hope that Students Union will take effective measures to ensure that students have rich after-school activities.

Li Ming （173 words）

語言亮点借鉴：

1. These clubs will offer students the opportunity to explore their passions. 这些社团将向学生们提供探索自己爱好的机会。passion 爱好，兴趣。

2. Joining these teams will not only improve the students’ health condition but help develop such life skills as teamwork in students. 加入这些运动队不但能改善学生的体质，而且有助于他们培养一些人生技能，比如团队协作能力。

3. Besides， students will meet like-minded peers and make new friends while working out. 此外，学生在锻炼的过程中会遇到志同道合的同龄人，结交到新朋友。like-minded 志同道合的。work out锻炼。

4. Apart from providing them with a break from regular classes， it helps students develop into all-rounded individuals. 除了讓学生们在常规课程之余休息一下，参加课外活动还能帮助学生成长为全面发展的人。apart from除了……还。all-rounded 全面发展的。

六级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “Nowadays more and more people take delight in helping the needy.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

这道2022年6月大学英语六级作文试题属于分析现象型，此类题目的特点是提出一个社会现象，要求考生分析这一现象并提出应对措施。本题中的社会现象是如今越来越多的人乐于帮助穷人。这篇作文的总体结构可以这样安排：第一段提出现象；第二段分析这一现象；第三段总结全文，提出建议。

本文可以用故事法开头，即用一个小故事引出所要讨论的社会现象。这种开头的优点是从人入手，富有人情味，容易激起读者的阅读兴趣。我们可以在本文的开头讲一个自己的朋友帮助穷人的故事：每个星期天，我的朋友莫妮卡·张都在一个施粥所忙碌地工作。接着用一个过渡句引出本文所要讨论的现象。

第二段分析这个社会现象。我们不妨从分析原因的角度下笔，即分析为什么如今越来越多的人乐于帮助穷人。我们可以首先指出帮助别人能增强我们的幸福感，让我们找到人生的意义。为了避免论述太抽象，我们可以举一个具体的例子：我的伯父在退休之后不知道该干什么，陷入了抑郁。后来他到无家可归者收留所做志愿者。现在的他满足又快乐，感觉找到了人生的目标。

本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先指出帮助别人并不是单向付出，助人会让我们健康快乐。最后建议大家把助人当成生活的一个重要部分，让世界变得更加美好。

下面请看参考范文：

Nowadays more and more people take delight in helping the needy. Every Sunday finds my friend Monica Zhang， an office worker， working busily at a soup kitchen. Monica is hardly alone in her experience. According to a recent survey conducted in Shanghai， 84.1 percent of those polled said they lend a helping hand to the needy on a regular basis.

Helping others boosts our sense of happiness and helps us find meaning in our life. Helping out doesn’t just have a positive impact on the people we are helping， it’s also good for us. Nothing makes us feel better about ourselves than knowing that we’ve made a difference in someone’s life. Take my uncle as an example. After retiring from his job， he sank into depression as he felt at a loss what to do. Later he volunteered to work at a homeless shelter. A contented and happy man， he now feels like he has a purpose in life.

Helping the needy is never a one-way street. It makes us happy， which， in turn， makes us healthy. In order to make the world a better place， let’s make helping others an important part of our life. （196 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. Every Sunday finds my friend Monica Zhang， an office worker， working busily at a soup kitchen. 我的朋友莫妮卡·张是一位公司职员。每个星期天她都在一个施粥所忙碌地工作。

2. Nothing makes us feel better about ourselves than knowing that we’ve made a difference in someone’s life. 没有什么比知道自己改变了别人的生活让我们感觉更好了。make a difference in/to对……产生影响。

3. After retiring from his job， he sank into depression as he felt at a loss what to do. 因为不知道该做什么，他退休之后陷入消沉。feel at a loss感到不知所措。

4. A contented and happy man， he now feels like he has a purpose in life. 他现在是一个满足又快乐的人，感觉人生有了目标。a contented and happy man是主语he的同位语，置于句首是为了调节句子的节奏。

5. Helping the needy is never a one-way street. 帮助穷人从来都不是单向付出。