2020年12月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（三）

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四      级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic “Changes in the Way of Education”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道大学英语四级作文题目要求考生论述教育方式的变化。说起教育方式的变化，最显著的就是近年来网络教育的兴起。尤其是在新冠病毒暴发之后，网络教育成为人们停课不停学的唯一选择。

这篇作文可以写三个段落。第一段提出所要讨论的话题，先指出近年来教育方式发生了巨大变化，然后引用统计数据来支撑这一观点。第二段分析教育方式发生巨大变化的原因。由于这是一篇论说文，所以分析原因就成为本文的重心所在。为了使分析透彻，我们不妨从两方面展开。第一，科技进步是教育方式变化的推动力量。然后我们通过今昔对比对这一点略作展开：过去人们要取得文凭或证书，就得到实体学校去报名和上课;但是随着互联网的兴起，如今人们只需要一台电脑和网络连接，就可以随时随地接受教育。接着，我们指出教育方式变化的另一个推动因素是新冠病毒的暴发，因为它加速了这场教育革命。在新冠病毒暴发之后，世界各地的学校纷纷关闭，无数学生只好转到线上上课。本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先指出尽管网络教育有种种好处，但它并非没有挑战。然后，指出结合了线上线下学习的混合式教育模式也许会更好地满足人们对优质教育的需求。下面请看参考范文：

Recent years have seen dramatic changes in the way of education. According to a Shanghai University survey， close to three quarters （74.3%） of respondents reported having taken online courses in the past five years.

Advances in technology are the driving force behind the changes. In the past， if you wanted to get a diploma or a certificate， you had to sign up for courses at a brick-and-mortar institution and physically attend class. But with the rise of the Internet， education is available anytime and anywhere as long as you have a computer and an internet connection. Another contributing factor is the outbreak of Covid-19， which accelerated the revolution in education. With schools shut across the world in the wake of Covid-19， millions of students had to shift from the conventional learning model to low-contact online learning.

For all its benefits， e-learning is not without challenges. Perhaps a hybrid model of education， which combines the advantages of offline and online learning， will better meet people’s demand for a quality education. （169 words）

語言亮点借鉴：

1. Recent years have seen dramatic changes in the way of education.近年来教育方式发生了巨大变化。see见证，作此义时句子的主语一般是某地或某个（段）时间。

2. In the past， if you wanted to get a diploma or a certificate， you had to sign up for courses at a brick-and-mortar institution and physically attend class. 在过去，你如果想取得文凭或证书，就必须在实体学校报名参加课程，而且要到班里上课。sign up for 报名参加。brick-and-mortar 实体的。

3. With schools shut across the world in the wake of Covid-19， millions of students had to shift from the conventional learning model to low-contact online learning. 在新冠病毒暴发之后，由于全世界的学校关闭，无数学生不得不从传统的学习模式转到接触少的线上学习。“With schools shut…”是一个with的复合结构，表示原因。in the wake of sth 作为……的结果。

4. For all its benefits， e-learning is not without challenges. 尽管在线学习有种种好处，但它并非没有挑战。for all尽管，意思相当于despite。

5. Perhaps a hybrid model of education， which combines the advantages of offline and online learning， will better meet people’s demand for a quality education.也许结合了线下线上学习的混合式教育模式会更好地满足人们对优质教育的需求。

六      级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on why students should be encouraged to develop creativity. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

這道大学英语六级作文题目要求考生论述为什么学生应当被鼓励提高创造能力。2016年12月的大学英语六级作文曾经考过创造的重要性及鼓励创造的措施，但是本题的范围有所缩小。因此，我们写这篇作文时不能泛泛地论述创造能力的重要性，而应集中论述创造能力对学生的重要性，否则就是扣题不紧。

这篇作文可以写三个段落。第一段提出本文所要论述的主题。我们不妨用常见的转折法开头。即开篇先从一般人对创造能力的看法谈起，然后话锋一转，提出自己对创造能力的看法：创造能力是每一个学生需要具备的生存技能，这样才能在学校里和职场上获得成功。第二段论述为什么学生应当被鼓励提高创造能力，原因不外乎创造能力对学生非常重要。为了使论述深入透彻，我们可以从两个层面展开：在校园里和在职场上。我们首先指出学生需要具有创造能力才能在学校里获得成功，然后引用石溪大学的一项研究来证实这一点。接着，我们可以指出创造能力会让学生在将来的事业中受益。这是因为学生具备了创造能力，才能用最高效的方式解决工作场所中的问题，从而脱颖而出。因此可以毫不夸张地说，创造能力对今天的学生来说是最宝贵的一种能力。本文可以用建议法结尾：第三段先呼应开头，重述主题，指出创造能力并不是作家和音乐家的专利，而是学生在21世纪成功的必备技能。最后建议学校更加重视培养学生的创造能力。下面请看参考范文：

When we think of creativity， most of us will readily associate it with art， from composing music to writing fiction. But rarely is creativity so mysterious. In fact， it is a life skill every student needs to possess to be successful in school and in the workplace.

A student needs to be creative to achieve success on campus， as creativity is what makes his school life fun and work easier. A Stony Brook University study finds that creative students are more likely to score high in exams and be popular with their peers. What’s more， the ability to think creatively benefits a student in his future career. With creativity， he can solve workplace problems in the most efficient way， which helps him stand out. Hence， it’s no stretch to say that creativity is the single most valuable skill for students today.

Creativity is not the monopoly of writers and musicians. It’s a crucial skill for students to succeed in the 21st century. Therefore， schools and colleges should attach more importance to encouraging creativity in students. （175 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. When we think of creativity， most of us will readily associate it with art， from composing music to writing fiction. 当我们想到创造能力的时候，大部分人会马上把它与艺术联系到一起，从作曲到写小说。

2. With creativity， he can solve workplace problems in the most efficient way， which helps him stand out. 有了创造能力，他就能够用最高效的方法解决工作中的问题，这有助于他脱颖而出。stand out脱颖而出，引人注目。

3. Hence， it’s no stretch to say that creativity is the single most valuable skill for students today. 因此可以毫不夸张地说，创造能力对今天的学生来说是最有用的技能。it’s no stretch to say可以毫不夸张地说。single与形容词最高级连用，起加强语气的作用。

4. Therefore， schools and colleges should attach more importance to encouraging creativity in students. 因而，中小学和大学应更加重视鼓励学生的创造性。attach importance to重视。