唐孝云
读后续写是高考备考过程中的重难点,读后续写要求考生根据阅读材料和所给两个段落的开头语进行故事续写。学生要想写出情节起伏、逻辑合理、结构完整的短文,可以围绕CAF?魪提问来设计续写情节。CAFE分别指代:Characters(故事里的主人公,如人或动物),Actions(主人公的动作行为),Feelings(主人公的感受),Environment(故事发生时的环境)。本文以高考题为例探讨如何围绕CAF?魪提问来设计续写情节。
实例分析(2018年6月浙江卷)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens. while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a hose ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(編织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为l50左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ____________________________________________
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Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.__________________________________________
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文章大意:在夏季的某一天,我和爸爸去Uncle Paul 的农场拜访,外出骑马时迷路了。
故事情节的发展和主人公心情的变化过程如下:开始,和父亲去Uncle Paul的农场(开心、兴奋)→ 发展,和父亲去野外骑马(开心、兴奋)→高潮,兔子出现、我们迷路(惊讶、担心、害怕)→转折、结局。
根据给出的段首句,提出问题,完成以下表格,设计续写情节。
针对Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse提出以下问题,并完成以下表格:
(1)How did my horse react?
(2)What did I do and how did I feel?
(3)What did my father do and how did my father feel?
(4)Where did we go?
針对Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.的内容提出以下问题,并完成以下表格:
(1)What did I do and how did I feel?
(2)What did my father do and How did he feel?
(3)How did we go back?
(4)How did we feel on the way back?
(5)How about the environment on the way back?
A possible version:
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. As a result, my horse was frightened(马的心理)and began to run wildly(马的动作). I held the reins(我的动作)tightly immediately to control it but failed. Scared and nervous(我的感受), I felt nearly suffocated(窒息). My dad saw what had happened and shouted loudly(父亲的动作),“Dont worry!Im with you!”He was worried about me(父亲的心理)so he followed me closely(父亲的动作). My horse ran so fast that I felt the wind blew past on my face quickly(环境描写). Fortunately, my horse calmed down(马的心理)and slowed down(马的动作)gradually. As it finally stopped, I felt relieved(我的心理). My dad caught up with me(父亲的动作)soon and breathed a sigh of relief(父亲的感受)when he found me safe. We both sat on our horseback to have a rest(我和父亲的动作). Only this moment did we realize that we had run a long way and stopped on a patch of open grass (环境描写).
Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. Feeling nervous and frightened(我的心理), I asked my dad(我的动作),“What should we do?”He patted me on my shoulder gently and comforted me calmly(父亲的动作), “Take it easy. We will find our way back.”Hearing his words, I calmed down(我的心理)and managed to(我的动作)think out a way back. Suddenly, Uncle Pauls words flashed across my mind. I told my dad(我的动作)that we could follow our track to go back home. Then we started to seek our track and rode along it(我和父亲的动作)slowly due to the darkness(环境描写). After a long time, the farm house was still out of sight(环境描写). Being hungry and tired, we were seized by depression (心理描写). At that moment, we heard someone calling us(我和父亲的动作). It was Uncle Paul who came to find us(Uncle Paul的动作)!“We are here!”we yelled with great excitement(我和父親的动作和心理). Finally, we went home(我和父亲的动作)together safe and sound.
模拟训练
阅读下列短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Two months before exams, my friends Tom, Andy, Peter and I along with my lovely dog Beans, planned to have a trip some nearby place, but all of us wanted to do some adventure, so we decided to visit a thick forest in the outskirt of our city. After our exams which we finished in June we all prepared to go on an adventurous trip along with some food, water, torch and most importantly our cell phone.
But the day was so strange. We did not find any vehicle which could drop us there. Anyhow, we managed to find a taxi which took us to the outskirt of the city. Another evidence of the strange sense of the day was that Peter had forgotten his cell phone at home. After we got out of the taxi, some of the passers-by told us the way to forest. Forest was looking very beautiful; voices of many birds, insects and animals could be heard properly. As we were moving forward we made a mark on every tree in our path, which would remind us the exit of the forest, and it was firstly decided that we would always keep our mobile in switch on mode and contact each other if we lost in the forest.
As we were moving forward Peter felt that somebody was following our foot steps but leaving his intuition to a joke we moved on. When we reached in the deep of the forest we lost our way and suddenly the smog spread everywhere and we were not able to see each other properly. All of us got very scared of what was happening around us. Suddenly, we noticed that Andy was not with us, then we heard someone shouting and we thought it was Andy, so we started searching for him but due to white smog we were not able to find him. Then I got an idea to call him and ask about his position. I tried to call him but because of network problem we were not able to contact with him. As the day was strange, our torches were left to no use in such thick smog.
注意: 1. 續写词数应为l50左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
After walking for 2-3 hours, I again tried to call Andy.
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Paragraph 2:
An hour Later, Tom succeeded in finding Andy.
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针对Paragraph 1: After walking for 2-3 hours, I again tried to call Andy. 的内容提出以下问题,并填写以下表格:
(1)Did I get through to Andy?
(2)If I got through to him, how did we feel?
(3)What did Andy and I tell each other?
(4)What did Peter and Tom do?
(5)How about my dog Beans?
(6)How about the environment?
针对Paragraph 2: An hour Later, Tom succeeded in finding Andy.的內容提出以下问题,并填写以下表格:
(1)How did we feel when seeing Andy?
(2)What did Peter, Dog Bean and I do?
(3)What did we do next?
(4)How about the environment?
(5)How could we get out of the forest?
(6)How did we feel after getting out of the forest?
参考范文
After walking for 2-3 hours, I again tried to call Andy. Luckily, I got through to him(我的动作)this time. At first, Andy and I were both too excited(我的心理)to say a word. Peter and Tom were also delighted(Peter和Tom的心理)beyond description. After we calmed down(我和Andy的心理), I comforted Andy(我的动作)gently. Though Andy sounded a little scared(我的心理), he told me he was fine(Andy的动作). We exchanged our position and discussed how we could gather together(我和Andy的动作). Finally, we made a decision that he stayed there and Tom would go to find him. Peter would stay with me and dog Beans(Peter的动作)because he didnt have his cell phone. After the call, Tom went to search for Andy(Tom的动作)immediately. It was so strange that the smog disappeared(环境描写)gradually.
An hour Later, Tom succeeded in finding Andy. As soon as Peter and I saw Andy, we were wild with joy(我和Peter的心理). We rushed to him and hugged together(我和Peter的动作) tightly. Even Dog Beans wagged its tail happily(Dog Beans的心理和动作). Tom looked at us(Tom的动作)with a big smile, saying it was time to go home. Hearing his words, we loosened the embrace(我、Peter和Andy的动作)and found that there was no smog(环境描写)at all. So we could see the beautiful forest and blue sky clearly(环境描写). It was really easy for us to find the marks on the trees which we had made on our way. Before dark, we got out of the forest(我们的动作)successfully by tracing those marks(我们的动作). Soon, we found a taxi to take us home(我们的动作). Though the trip was strange and frightening(我们的心理), it could definitely be called as an adventure, which has greatly promoted our friendship.
责任编辑 蒋小青