My Good Friend

My Good Friend

Li Ying is my classmate and she is also my good friend.She is fifteen years old this year,but she looks a little younger for her age.Though she isn’t very tall,and her eyes,nose and mouth are very small,but①I think she looks very beautiful.

Li Ying studies very hard.She often asks and answers questions in class.She likes every subject,so she does well at②all her lessons,especially English and math.She often helps others on③their lessons.I think that’s why everyone likes her.

She is a very outgoing girl.She is always smiling and often makes us laughing④,so we all like to play with her.She is confident.She believes she can do everything well.

Now Li Ying has gone to another school.All of us feel very sad,but we wish her the best.We all believe that her dream will come true.

安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校七（3）班 赵琪

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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师、省级骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习学研究会会员、《学英语》《英语周报》特约编辑；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》等；曾辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

1.优点:

本文是一篇成功的写人的记叙文。小作者向我们展示了一个乐观、爱学习、爱帮助人的好女孩的生动形象。

2.需要修改的地方：

①删去but。英语中，表示“虽然……但是……”时，用了though，就不能再用but。

②does well at应改为does well in。表示“在……方面做得好”，应用do well in。

③on应改为with。help sb.with sth.是习惯搭配，意为“帮助某人做某事”。

④laughing应改为laugh。make作“使；让”时，后面应接不带to的动词不定式作宾语补足语。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得22分。