How I Began to Learn English

How I Began to Learn English

My name is Zhang Hua.As my parents are both engaged in English study,I showed great interest in English even when I was a very little girl.Whenever my father was reading English,I always sat at the desk listening to him quietly.His reading sounded so interesting to me.Soon they began to teach my①English and I learned quickly and happily.

I studied English even harder after I got a chance to talk with an American.That took place when my father took me to Jinan where I happened to meet an American woman in a park.She insisted on to take②a photo for me.I agreed.Then I said in English,“Thank you very much.”Hearing this she was surprised.She patted me on my③head and asked me,“How old are you?”I told her that I was nine.She held up her thumb and smiled.

After I entered into④the middle school,I learned more and more English.Last year I won the first prize in the English contest of the whole city.This was a newmilestone(里程碑)in the long course of my English study.I will work hard on English.I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.

山东梁山杨营中学九年级（三）班 张华

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石继忠男，1989年参加工作，中学高级教师，济宁市骨干教师，市级教学能手。工作中，立足实际，认真搞好教学，创造性地开展学校的教育教学、教改科研工作，在教育这片田园里勤奋耕耘，积极探索，不断改进教学手段，吸收先进的教育理念，在多年的英语教学工作中，积累了丰富的教学经验，形成了自己独特的教学方法。从教以来一直担任初中毕业班的教学工作，在历年的中考中，所执教的班级都取得了优异的成绩，受到学校和社会各界的一致好评。曾先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇，现担任《英语周报》《英语辅导报》《学生英语报》《英语画刊》《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。

1.优点:

本文结构严谨，条理清晰，层次分明，结构合理，过渡自然。

2.需要修改的地方：

①my改为me。teach sb.English意为“教……英语”。

②to take改为taking。insist on后加动名词，意为“坚持做……”。

③my改为the。习惯上有些动作发生在身体某个部位时，用the而不用所有格。

④去掉into。enter=come into，不可与into连用。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。