An unforgettable thing

刘宇

My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the thing， I wanted to cry. But I didnt want to leted mother sad. So I went home and closed the door. Finally， her knowed the information. To my surprise， her didnt said nothing to me. I felt very warm.

文甜老師点评：该文通过回忆一件事来表达对妈妈的感激之情，整体上行文流畅，事件描述清楚，但过去时态使用不准确，尤其是动词的不规则变化错误较多，人称代词与物主代词使用混淆，连词使用也不够准确。另外，如果能再加上一些感激妈妈的具体行动，文章就更完整了。

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My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the news， I wanted to cry because I didnt want to make my mother sad. I went home sadly and closed the door. To my surprise， she didnt criticize me when she knew the truth. Instead， she smiled at me and encouraged me to do better next time. It made me feel warm and know how much she cares about me.

To thank her for her love， I will try my best to study harder and talk more with her. I will help her to do some housework so that she wont be too tired after work. I hope she can be healthy and happy every day！

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一篇好的英语作文，除了语句流畅、准确，意思连贯外，还应做到内容完整，注意要有开头和结尾。在写作时，要尽量避免逐句翻译，多用简单句，注意代词、时态的准确运用。