Walking to School

I think walk①to school is good for us.At first,walking to school is a good way to exercise and it’s good to②health.Next,it’s fun to walk together with friends every day.We can talk about interesting something③and know each other better.What’s more,if we go to school on foot,our parents won’t have to drive us to school.They will have more time to work and relax.More walking and less driving can help make our city much clean④.The streets will be less crowded than before.So I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.

Let’s go to school on foot from now on.

安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校七（3）班 胡月琪

1.优点：

本文观点明确，信息全面，立场鲜明。对“步行去上学”的优点进行了详细的阐述，最后提出自己的希望。本文使用了at first,next,what’s more等使得文章层次分明，结构清晰。而if引导的条件状语从句，使文章句式丰富，富有多样化。另外，短语的使用体现了作者不凡的语言功底。

2.需要修改的地方：

①walk改为walking。动词不能做主语，但是动名词可以做主语，故walk改为walking；

② to改为for。be good to意为“对某人好”，故此处应用be good for；

③ interesting something改为 something interesting。当形容词修饰 something,anything,nothing,everything等不定代词时，形容词必须放在不定代词的后面；

④clean改为cleaner。much修饰形容词或副词的比较级，故此处应将clean改为cleaner。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。