短文习作：地点介绍类

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地点介绍类的文章属于说明文。其特点是：事实正确、条理清楚、层次分明、语言简练、用词准确，具有科学性、客观性、知识性。介绍一个地点往往从以下几方面展开：地理位置，人口，面积，历史，名胜，特色。此类文章写作时应特别注意：①围绕主题，选好主题句，用好衔接词，使文章清晰明了;②描写顺序恰当，多由上到下，从里到外，由远到近;③注意描写详略得当，重点突出;④努力运用生动形象的语言，恰当运用形容词，副词，合并简单句，避免重复单调用词。

试题呈现

假如你是李华，家住十堰市。你的加拿大笔友Tina打算暑假来十堰旅游，请你根据下面提供的信息，给她回复一封电子邮件，介绍一下你的家乡。

位置：位于湖北省西北部

特征：有悠久的历史，人口340万，2.4万平方公里

概况：①旅游资源丰富：武当山（Mountain Wudang）海拔1612米，世界文化遗产，道教圣地与全国武术之乡; 丹江口水库：南水北调工程源头。

②交通便利，工业发达的汽车城。

③宜居城市：环境优美，气候适宜，生活节奏慢。

参考词汇： 遗产 heritage  道教 Taoism

丹江口水库 Danjiang Da

汽车城 motor city 宜居城市 livable city

位于lie in /be located（situated） in

南水北调South-North Water Diversion

写作步骤

1. 整合细节，构思结构布局（主题句+支撑句）

Paragraph 1：表明回信目的

Paragraph 2：武当山的地理基本信息

Paragraph 3：风景名胜、旅游资源（武当山、丹江水库）

Paragraph 4：城市特色（交通、汽车城、宜居城市）

Paragraph 5：结束语（表达期盼与欢迎）

2. 相关词汇表达

①坐落在：lie in /be located /situated in

②有……的历史：with/has a history of

③有……人口：with/has a population of

④面积有：cover an area of …

⑤盛产：be rich /abundant in

⑥旅游景点：scenic spots; places of interest; tourist attractions

⑦以……著名;闻名：be famous / well-known for; have a high reputation for

⑧发源地：the birthplace /cradle /hometown of /be home to…

⑨四季分明、气候宜人：a livable city whose view is delightful in all seasons; pleasant weather; proper temperature

⑩生活节奏慢：slow pace of life

3. 合并简单句，避免单一主语重复出现

地点介绍类文章的主语多单一，即为所介绍的地点。如何将拥有共同主语的简单句合并，使文章更加简洁紧凑呢？如“武当山是著名景点之一。武当山每年吸引许多外国游客到此观光旅游。”很多同学的直觉思维是写成Mountain Wudang is one of the well-known places of interest. Mountain Wudang attracts many foreigners every year， 我们可从以下一些结构入手合并简单句以避免主语单一。

①Mountain Wudang is one of the well-known places of interest on earth， which attracts a large number of foreigners every year.（定语从句）

②Mountain Wudang is one of the well-known places of interest on earth， bursting with/attracting a large number of foreigners every year.（分词作定语）

③Mountain Wudang is such a famous historical attraction that it attracts hundreds of thousands of foreign visitors each year. （使用“如此……以致……”的句型）

④So attractive is MountainWudang that it attracts hundreds of thousands of visitors home and abroad every year.（使用倒装句）

4. 参考范文

Dear Tina，

Im happy to have received your email and pleased to know that you are coming to Shiyan. Youve made the right choice to travel here. Now let me tell you something about the city.

Situated in the northwest of Hubei province， Shiyan is a city with a long history. It has a population of 3.4 million， covering an area of 24，000 square kilometers. The climate here varies from season to season， making it a good place for people to live in.

There are many places of interest in our city， of which Mount.wudang is the most famous. As the cradle of Taoism and Martial art， it draws tourists from everywhere every year. With an altitude of 1612 meters， it enables you to feast your eyes on all kinds of beautiful views while climbing. Besides， Danjiang dam， which is the water source of South-North Water Diversion， is not only a place of interest， but also playing an important part in Chinas water supply. Apart from all the above， the city is also a highly developed industrial city which is referred to as the “Motor City”. It is convenient for you to go to anywhere you like by railway or highway.

Whats more， the city has recently be chosen as one of the most livable cities because of the clean environment， pleasant climate and proper pace of life. As a Shiyan native， Im taking pride in it.

So welcome to our hometown and Im sure you will fall in love with it.

Yours，

Lihua

拓展写作

（1）湖北省

地理：中国中部，三面环山，长江穿境而过。九省通衢（承东启西，连南接北，交通便利）

人口：5816万      面积：18.59万平方公里

气候：温暖湿润，四季分明，适宜居住

主要城市：武汉、襄阳、宜昌

自然资源：森林矿场资源，千湖之省（湖泊河流多）

特产：热干面

风景名胜：黄鹤楼、武当山、三峡等

教育：中国高等教育基地，著名大学如武汉大学、华中科技大学

参考范文：

Located in central China， with Yangtza river flowing through it， Hubei province connects the south and the north as well as the north with the south， which contributes to a convenient traffic. Covering an area of 185.9 thousand square kilometers， it has a population of 5816 million. Surrounded by mountains on three sides and having thousands of lake， it enjoys a warm and humid climate. As a result， it is widely recognized as a livable city whose view is delightful in all seasons. There are many big cities in Hubei， such as Wuhan， Xiangyang and Yichang. Natural resources are abundant， particularly forest and fresh water.

Hubei is also well known for having a cluster of universities， such as Wuhan University. Wuhan university not only has a widespread reputation for cherry blossom scenery， but also is home to many outstanding high achievers. Being one of the higher education bases， Hubei is home to many distinguished scientists.

（2）武汉市

①九省通衢：武汉位于长江与汉水交汇处;是工业，交通，教育和金融中心

②江山如画：金碧辉煌的黄鹤楼，历史悠久的编钟

③七月流火：感受江汉路熙熙攘攘的人流，品尝武汉的特色小吃热干面

参考释义：黄鹤楼-the Yellow Crane Tower

编钟-Chime Bells

参考范文：

Wuhan， a major industrial， financial， and educational complex in central China，is located at the joint of the Han and Yangtze rivers with its railway and inland and airport which makes it accessible in all directions.

Standing on the top of the Yellow Crane Tower， dating back to hundreds of years which is regarded as one of the landmarks of Wuhan， you can never refuse a strong itch to enjoy a real feast for its natural beauty. The waters of Yangtze River flowing lazily， accompanied by the wonderful music given out by a set of fantastic unearthed instruments， Chime Bells with a history of more than 1000 years which is also one of the seventh wonders in the world will come to your eyes.

Wandering in the Hanzheng pavement in downtown in the July sunshine， you are to stop， not to wipe your sweat on your forehead， but to have a taste of Hot and dry noodles （our local specialty） or just to do some shopping. It is really a place where amazing happens. Can you feel the urge to have a visit as soon as possible？

即学即练

请根据中文， 完成短文。

Guangzhou， the third largest city in China， which is also known as City of Flowers， serves as the capital city of Guangdong and （1）__________________（政治，经济，科学，教育，文化中心）.（2）___________________

（全市面积7434.4平方公里）， it is home to more than 11 million people.

Located in the middle of Guangdong， north of the Pearl River Delta with the Pearl River winding its way through the city， Guangzhou （3）____________（气候温暖湿润）. Besides， it is a famous city with （4）__________________（有着2，200多年历史）and a starting port of the Maritime Silk Road. With its beautiful scenery， Guangzhou （5）______________（旅游资源丰富）.

Keys：（1）the centre of its political，economic，scientific，educational，and cultural life

（2）Covering/With an area of 7434.4 square kilometers

（3）enjoys a warm and wet climate

（4）a history of more than 2， 200 years

（5）is also abundant in traveling resources