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[真题还原]

假设你叫李华，在你居住的小区有很多乱涂乱写的现象，有人在此做广告，有人在这里画画，甚至骂人。请你根据下图内容，结合生活实际，给中国日报China Daily写一篇文章反映这种现象，说明自己对这一现象的看法，并提出解决办法。

注意：1.根据以上内容写一篇短文，不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；2.准确使用语法和词汇，使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思；3.词数：100个左右。开头已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people.

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Your sincerely， Li Hua

[学生佳作]

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people. Some make drawings or practising their handwriting on walls in these places to show their talents or for fun. Some take advantage of such public places to make free advertisements. Others even put dirty words in these places to curse those whom they dont like.

In my point of view， measures should be taken by local administration organizations to keep public places tidy， clean and well preserved. On the other hand， people should mind their behaviors . As we know， the imageof a neighborhoodor a city is reflected especially in public places. The practices above spoil our living environmentand the impression on travelers to our hometown.

Yours sincerely， Li Hua

[教师点评]

本篇看图作文针砭时弊，反映我们现实生活中的不良现象。话题新颖，描述了图画中的现象，并发表自己的看法，该生组织文字材料和写作的能力都比较高。

[真题还原]

假设你校举行题为“网吧的危害（Harmful Influence of Cyber Centers）”的征文活动。请根据下图写一篇英语短文，描述图中的内容，并就其反映的现象发表评论和提出方案。

要点提示：

1.一位父亲在找儿子2.街上满是网吧3.儿子在网吧玩4.描述网吧多的现状5.网吧的危害（评论）6.解决方案

注意：

1.词数：100左右；2.可适当增添细节，以使行文连贯；3.文中不可使用真实姓名和学校名称；

4.参考词汇：网吧：cyber center.

[学生佳作]

As we can see in the picture， a father is anxiously looking for his son addicted to online games. It seems that he has great trouble finding the boy because the street is full of cyber centers and he hardly knows in which one his son is enjoying games.

Nowadays， more and more cyber centers are being opened under cover of improving intelligence. In reality， these are places where large numbers of teenagers run into online chat or games and can rarely be pulled out. In my opinion， serious measures should be taken to reduce the number of cyber centers as well as to help teenagers develop some other hobbies which do them good.

[教师点评]

本篇写作的话题是关于网吧对中学生的危害，描述了图中的内容，并发表评论和提出方案。这样的话题与中学生的生活密切相关，是近年中考英语书面表达的热点话题。

（作者单位：山东临沂临港经济开发区临港一中）