作文大比拼

原文：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look1 my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I very like it2. This3 shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its threeteen4 dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red hat5.

分析：

本篇介绍了自己衣柜里的服饰。叙述简洁、有条理，值得学习，但其中也有几处需要注意：

1. Look 是不及物动词，所谓不及物动词也就是不能直接跟宾语。如果要跟宾语，应在其后加上介词at。

2. “我非常喜欢它”正确的语序为I like it very much。

3.shoes 为复数，所以不能用this, 表示这双鞋应说成this pair of shoes。

4. 数字13 的表达需要特殊记忆，thirteen。

5. “它是一个红色的帽子。”冠词a用来修饰名词hat。为了避免重复，在此应用one 代替hat。

改正：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look at my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I like it very much. This pair of shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its thirteen dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red one.