２００８年高考作文“闪光点”集萃

王琴芳　李淑静

学生们都知道要使用高级词汇及较复杂结构来写作，但在实际操作时，却对高级词汇及较复杂句型感到有些抽象、茫然，以至于错误地认为，使用一些“偏”、“难”、“怪”的词汇或“罗唆”、“重复”、“冗长”的复合句就是使用高级词汇及较复杂句型，结果往往事与愿违。怎样才能做到“高级但不卖弄”、“多变但不出错”、“简洁但不残缺”、“连贯但不牵强”、“复杂但不模糊”的正确合理地使用高级词汇及复杂句型呢？下面请欣赏2008年高考范文“闪光点”，让你零距离感受和体会这种写作技巧。

一、使用高级词汇及最佳搭配（划线单词为本节“闪光点”，黑体为其它类型“闪光点”）

1. We would be grateful if you could join us that day. Looking forward to hearing from you. (全国I)

2. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain and going to an amusement park.（北京）

3. Thank you for your concern.（安徽）

4. I was so desperate on hearing that.

（湖北）

5. So I think “Friday News Hour” can broaden our mind and enrich our school life.(陕西)

6. The sport has been growing steadily from 1896s three events to todays seventeen.(广东)

7. Perhaps the lifestyle and dialect here dont agree with you. (山东)

8. Ive determined to enter for it.(上海)

二、使用了精炼的介词短语、with复合结构及同位语

1. More than 1,000 paintings will be on show, and high school students ... (全国I)

2. Shakespeare, a son from a poor family, a man of little education, wrote plays and poems that are read all over the world.(湖南)

3. He was a man full of imagination.(湖南)

4. Shooting, originated as a means of survival, developed into a sport only in the late 19th century. (广东)

5. Im Li Hua, a student in Sichuan.(全国I)

6. By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? (全国I)

三、使用非谓语动词（短语）

1. While climbing the mountain, we enjoy the warm sunshine and a beautiful view.（北京）

2. Born in America, Thomas Edison was a great scientist and inventor. He was once thought to be a boy who was not worth educating. (湖南)

3. I believe that doing all these small things will improve our environment and help make our world a better place to live in. (四川)

4. As a boy of 17, I am outgoing, good at English and have experience of working well with children aged from 7 to 12.(福建)

5. Thanks for your joining us in the class making our class have new blood. (山东)

四、恰当的承接短语、插入语、省略及替代

1. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so you will learn and remember Chinese words more easily.(全国II)

2. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.(全国II)

3. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. 4. At the same time, however, he should realize the pencil has its own advantages.(北京）

5. Whats more, it will help us improve our reading skills.(陕西)

6. For one thing, I can help take care of the children. For another thing, I can improve my English, make more friends, and enrich my life during the summer vacation.(福建)

7. My reasons for attending the competition are as follows. (上海)

8. In addition, in my opinion, taking extracurricular activities can raise learning efficiency and at the same time it can contribute to the class. (上海)

五、 it句型及并列句

1. The compasses are big, drawing a circle with ease, while the pencil is small, drawing a line with great effort.(北京)

2. When it comes to de-stressing, it helps to set aside some time for yourself once a week. (江西)

3. I like him because his comedies and tragedies bring me into a fantastic world; I love him because his poems let me enjoy the beauty of the English language; I admire him because his keen sights set me thinking and teach me how to lead a meaningful life! (并列句)(湖南)

4. As for my suggestion, I think its better to have it twice a week. (陕西）

5. It is a good opportunity for the only child like me to learn to share and work together. (福建)

6. But recently I found it difficult for you to get on well with the students in our class.(山东)

六、使用被动句

1. These bags are made of a variety of materials that can be easily treated when they become rubbish. （安徽）

2. As the work can be divided among several people, it can be done differently. (浙江)

3. Women were first allowed to compete in the Olympic shooting in 1968.(广东)

七、使用主从句

1. So in my opinion, while we are confident in ourselves, we should recognize the strengths in others and show due respect for them.(while 引导让步状语) (北京)

2. I should try to use both sides of paper whenever it is possible. (四川)

3. For example, if I am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening, I will remember to turn off the lights. (四川)

4. ... ; be open-minded to different opinions even though you dont like them.(江苏)

5. Secondly, whether you come from the snow-stricken areas or Wenchuan earthquake area, we are all friends here.（山东）

6. When I was reading the advertisement, the aim of this activity impressed me greatly. (福建)

八、使用定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句及名言警句

1. This is one of the many steps we are taking to make our country an even cleaner place. （安徽）

2. He said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. （湖北）(宾语从句，原因状语从句， it句型)

3. What impresses me most is his famous saying, “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.” （湖南）

4. People may also choose to work in a team where they can learn from each other and help each other.(浙江)

5. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen more to others. (江苏)

6. Thirdly, do as the Romans do.(山东)

7. Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US. (全国I)

九、感叹句、虚拟语气、倒装句及特殊句型

1. Therefore, I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month. （湖北）

2. Seldom do we know what is happening both at home and abroad, let alone what we can do for our country. (陕西)

3. It was not until at the end of 19th century that shooting, originated as a means of survival, earned its status as a sport. (强调句，广东)

4. Only in this way can you fit in with everything here. (山东)

十、复杂长句

1. He told me gently like this: a good rule to keep in mind is that no matter how enjoyable your extracurricular activities are, they shouldnt cut into your study time. (江西)

2. From him, I realized the secret to success is not when and where you were born, but what you are doing and how you do in your life. (湖南）

3. Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it is easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be found. (江苏)

4. I am very excited to hear that our class will compete in the group dancing competition organized by our school for the first place after hearing what our monitor had said. (上海)

5. The column is open to all the students but we have to point out that the content of the compositions must be close to students everyday life and well-written compositions

will be graded and awarded, with the winners names appearing on the board of the column. （重庆）