As we know, it is very important for淤keep healthy. But do you know how tokeep healthy? Here is some advice for you.
First, I think you must have enough food to keep healthy. Second, you shouldkeep yourself clean and tidy. Always wash your hands. Third, keep your windowsopen for one or two hour于every day. So the fresh air can get in your room. Fourth,you should eat more vegetables and fruits, so盂they are good for your health. Finally,try to do some sports every day. I think doing some sports is necessary for you tokeep healthy.
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张超男,河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师,从事英语教育教学工作30 多年;多年来,在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇,并有多篇文章获奖;曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作;曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。
優点:本文主旨明确,条理清晰。小作者给出了四点不同方面的建议,这些建议符合实际,操作性和实用性都很强。总之,这是一篇逻辑明晰、语法正确的学生范文。
需要修改的地方:
①for 改为to。important 后面加to do something 表示“做某事很重要”。
②hour 改为hours。two 后面的可数名词应用复数形式。
③so 改为because。根据前文内容,这里应表原因,所以用because 连接。
评分:按照中考英语作文满分20 分的标准,本文修改前可得18 分。