My Weekends
I often have fun on weekends. I usually go to the library to read books on Saturday morning. After lunch, I go swimming with my friends. At① Saturday night, I go to movies with some friends. On Sunday morning, I always do my homework. But sometimes I also go for a walk. On Sunday afternoon, I usually go for a picnic with my good friends. I often go out for dinner with my parents on Sunday evening. I go to bed at 10 oclock in the evening. Im busy and② happy.
江苏省连云港市罗阳中学七(5)班 张智玉
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陈传光 男 江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师,从事教育工作逾15年。江苏省教育学会会员,连云港市优秀教育园丁,曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖,班主任基本功大赛市一等奖;有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表;指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了不错的成绩,有多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
点评
1. 优点:
周末或许是大家一周最期待的时间吧!在这篇文章中,我们了解了小作者的周末生活。小作者详细记叙了自己的周末活动,例如看书、游泳、看电影、做作业、野餐等等。最后,用一句话总结,自己虽然很忙但是也很开心。本文结构清晰、语言流畅,是一篇优秀的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①At改为On。具体某一天的晚上要使用介词on。
②and改为but。上下文是转折关系。
3. 评分:
按江蘇省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准,本文修改前可得22分。