刁靖宇
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姜经志 男,中学英语高级教师、省级骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习研究会会员、《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语》特约编辑;多年来,在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇,并有多篇论文获奖;曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》,参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册;辅导的学生有30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Weekends mean that people can have a two-day rest. People can go out to enjoy them① or get together with relatives and friends to talk with each other.
Everyone spends weekends in his own way. In these two days, some people like to relax by listen② to music, reading novels or watching films, others perhaps are more active by playing basketball, skating or dancing. Different people have different ways of relaxing.
I used to spend weekends with my family or my friends. Sometimes my parents took me to visit their old friends. Sometimes I went to the library to study or borrow some books to gain knowledges③. I also went to see various exhibitions to broaden my mind. A trip to the seashore or a mountain resort was my favorite way of spending weekends. Weekends are always enjoyable for me.
1. 优点:
小作者用了两个段落的内容来说明人们如何过周末,最后一個段落回顾自己过周末的方式。文章中心突出,论述充分,语言流畅易懂,语意连贯,表达的意思完整。小作者成功地运用了宾语从句、动词不定式及“used to”结构等,体现了扎实的语言基本功。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①“them”应改为“themselves”。“enjoy”后接反身代词,即“enjoy oneself”,意为“玩得开心;过得愉快”。
②“listen”应改为“listening”。“by”是介词,后接动词时应使用动词的“-ing”形式。
③“knowledges”应改为“knowledge”。“knowledge”为不可数名词,没有复数变化。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准,本文修改前可得23分。