I Live in a Happy and Loving Family

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张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、市优秀英语教师、县骨干教师，从事英语教育教学工作29年;多年来，在省级以上报刊《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖;曾参编高中版教辅资料《天天向上》和《三维方案》的编写工作，并荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;多次辅导多名学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

Hello， everyone！Im glad to tell you that I live in a happy and loving family.

Therere three people in my family. They are my father， my mother and I. My father and my mother love me so much. In the morning， my mother usually gets up early to make a① delicious breakfast for me. After breakfast， my father drives me to school if it rains and② snows. Every day， my mother helps washes③ my clothes. She is really a hard-working woman. Also， she reads interesting stories to me in the evening. Its very relaxed④. On weekends， my parents like taking a trip with me， because they want me to learn more and understand more. I enjoy the time with my parents. My dear father and mother， thank you for all you have done for me. I love you forever. I think I should do anything⑤ for my dear parents， too.

河北省阜城縣第四中学九（2）班 宋广智

1. 优点：

在每个人的成长过程中，家人的陪伴很温暖，尤其是父母的付出更让人感到幸福。本文小作者以时间顺序写出了父母对自己的爱，简单但是饱含温情，无微不至。在文章结尾更体现了小作者对父母的感恩之心，使文章的内涵更加丰富。本文条理清楚，语言质朴，情感饱满，温馨感人，以小见大，文辞优美，值得借鉴。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① 去掉a。三餐的单词前不用冠词。

② and改为or。or在这里表示选择的关系。

③ washes改为wash。help do指“帮助做某事”。

④ relaxed改为relaxing。relaxing意为“令人放松的”，用来形容事物。

⑤ anything改为something。anything用于疑问句和否定句，而something多用于肯定句。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17分。