写前导练
I.话题词汇精粹
1.号召某人做某事:_________________________________
2.呼吁某人做某事:________________________________
3.对……有影响:___________________________________
4.采取措施:________________________________________
5.采取行动:________________________________________
6.养成习惯:________________________________________
7.列举:____________________________________________
8.认真对待:_______________________________________
9.对……有好处:__________________________________
10.关爱;关心:______________________________________
11.对……负责:___________________________________
12.产生影响:_______________________________________
Ⅱ.话题表达积累
13.正如大家在学校所看到的那样,许多学生……As everybody can see in our school,many students...
14.首先,我想向大家列举一些……First of all,I want to make a list of...
15.他们总是随心所欲地……They always...as they like.
16.面对这些不良习惯,你难道……?Don’t you...when you are faced with these bad habits?
17.我认为该是我们采取……行动的时候了。I think it is (high/about) time that we should take action...
18.一方面,好习惯可以……;另外一方面,好习惯也可以……On one hand,good habits can...;on the other hand,they can also...
19.如果我们及时采取行动,那我们就……
If we can take action to...,we will...20.让我们早点行动……吧!
Let’s take action...right away!
情境导读
假定你是李华,某外国语学校的学生会主席。最近,你校发起了一个名为“消除不良行为习惯”的活动。请你代表学生会根据以下提示写一份倡议书。
内容包括:
1.身边的不良行为习惯;
2.好习惯的重要性;
3.你的倡议。
注意:1.词数120左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。Dear students,
Students’Union
写中导引
一、审题谋篇
体裁:倡议书,属于实用性应用文写作
人称:第一、二、三人称
时态:以一般现在时和一般将来时为主
注意问题:列举不良行为习惯时,要实事求是,要客观合理;发出倡议时,语气要坚决并且提出希望。
二、布局与行文
结构与要点第一部分:列举不良行为习惯常规表达D e a r s t u d e n t s,①W e c a n s e e i n o u r s c h o o l t h a t s o m e s t u d e n t s d o n’t h a v e g o o d b e h a v i o r h a b i t s.T h e y d o n’t g e t u p e a r l y a n d a r e l a t e f o r s c h o o l.T h e y t h r o w r u b b i s h a n d p a r k t h e i r b i c y c l e s a n y w h e r e a s t h e y l i k e.②T h e y d o n’t b e h a v e a c c o r d i n g t o t h e e t i q u e t t e r u l e s,e i t h e r.
结构与要点 常规表达第二部分:介绍好习惯的重要性第三部分:发出呼吁和收尾③I t h i n k i t’s t i m e f o r u s t o f o r m g o o d b e h a v i o r h a b i t s w h e n w e’r e s t u d y i n g a t s c h o o l.④F i r s t,g o o d h a b i t s h a v e a p o s i t i v e e f f e c t o n o u r c h a r a c t e r s,⑤a n d i t w i l l d e t e r-m i n e o u r f u t u r e a n d f o r t u n e.⑥S e c o n d,g o o d h a b i t s a r e s y m b o l s o f C h i n e s e t r a d i t i o n a l v i r t u e s,⑦a n d w e a r e r e s p o n s i b l e t o s p r e a d t h e m t o t h e w o r l d.D e a r f r i e n d s,⑧i f w e s t a r t t o c h a n g e o u r b e h a v i o r h a b i t s r i g h t a w a y,w e c a n p l a y a r o l e i n t h e f u t u r e.S t u d e n t s’U n i o n
写后导思
1.语言升级
根据以下提示对对应的句子进行升级表达,然后重新将其连接成一篇流畅、连贯的短文。必要时可以增加适当的衔接词。
①用as can be seen in our school改成插入语形式
②用 what’s worse 连接
③用 it’s (high/about) time that+ should do 或者did句式改写
④用for one thing改写
⑤用非限制性定语从句改写
⑥用for another thing改写
⑦用非限制性定语从句改写
⑧用take actions to do和make a big difference改写
2.评价反思
【高级范文】
Dear students,
As can be seen in our school,some students don’t have good behavior habits.They don’t get up early and are late for school.They throw rubbish and park their bicycles anywhere as they like.What’s worse,they don’t behave according to the etiquette rules.
I think it’s high time that we should form good behavior habits when we’re studying at school.For one thing,good habits have a positive effect on our characters,which will determine our future.For another thing,good habits are symbols of Chinese traditional virtues,which are supposed to be spread to the world.
Dear friends,if we take actions to change our behavior habits right away,we can make a big difference in the future.
Students’Union
答题规范评价项目 项目得分或档次A.整洁完美 B.较为整洁 C.涂改较多 D.无法辨别A.符合要求 B.减掉2分卷面整洁性篇幅规范性要点完整性A.完整无缺 B.个别遗漏 C.遗漏较多 D.偏题跑题语言质量用词准确性语法正确性表达丰富性篇章逻辑 结构清晰性行文流畅性A.准确无误 B.些许错误 C.错误较多 D.词不达意A.正确无误 B.些许错误 C.错误较多 D.语法混乱A.丰富多样 B.较为丰富 C.个别表达 D.词汇堆砌A.一目了然 B.较为清晰 C.些许混乱 D.混乱不堪A.流畅自然 B.较为流畅 C.部分阻滞 D.完全阻滞个人评级及得分老师评级及得分改进措施