A Letter to Sam

张超

Dear Sam，

Im so glad to tell you something about our school， one of the most well-known schools in China.

Our school was founded in 1951. It lie① in the southeast of Hebei Province. It is famous in② its good quality in teaching. Now it has about 1，800 students who are working hard for our country. The number of teachers are③ more than 100. The teachers teach very well and work hard to help the students. During the past 60 years， a great number of students have graduated from our school. Many of them have made great successes in their own field. We are all proud for④ them.

I hope youll have a chance to visit our school in the near future.

Yours，

Zhang Qi

河北省阜城縣古城中学八年级（3）班 张琪

点评

1. 优点：

本文覆盖了所有的提示要点，表达自然流畅，结构严谨。小作者在行文时有意识地使用了定语从句、宾语从句等一些较复杂的句子结构，句与句间使用了一些连词，使文章结构连贯，层次井然，体现了小作者扎实的写作功底。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①lie应改为lies。因为句子主语是单数名词our school，谓语动词应用第三人称单数形式。

②in应改为for。be famous for是固定短语，意思是“以……而著名”。

③are应改为is。the number of...意为“……的数目”，作主语时，谓语动词要用单数形式。

④for改为of。be proud of...为固定短语，意为“因……而自豪”。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分20的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。endprint