A Girl Who Looks like a Sunflower

A Girl Who Looks like a Sunflower

I would like to tell you about a pretty（可爱的）girl who looks like a sunflower（向日葵）. Her friends gave her this beautiful nickname（昵称）. The pretty girl is me—Anne.

Speaking of the source（来源）of the name, I guess that there are many reasons（原因）.

Firstly, I am a happy girl and I have a lot of pleasant（愉快的）things to share（分享）with my friends. My friends are always willing to hear my travelling（旅行的）experiences（经历）. Last holiday, I told them a funny story about a baby elephant who can dance along with music in Thailand（泰国）. I took lots of pictures to show the cute animal. Almost all of my friends laughed loudly（大声地）when they saw these photos.

My friends have told me why they like getting along with me. They view me as a warm-hearted（热心的）friend. When they face diffculties（困难）, I often give them a hand, such as teaching them some homework.

I have some good hobbies（爱好）that attract（吸引）my friends. It is a happy thing for them to hear how I study English and go diving（潜水）under the sea. And they learn some useful ways to speak English and memorize（记忆）words. When I talk about the underwater creatures（生物）, they would like to try this activity（活动）.

I am Anne—a sunfower.

杨冯清予

云南师范大学附属小学 五年级

指导老师：冯志恒

豆豆：在这篇作文中，小作者采用“总—分”的结构，先开门见山地点题，说明自己就是“像向日葵一样的女孩”，然后进行分述，列出理由证明自己的观点。文章条理清晰，描写生动，各种时态、从句的运用也非常得当，是一篇质量很高的作品。