A Visit to Qingdao

江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学八（2）班 王梦蕊

A Visit to Qingdao

江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学八（2）班 王梦蕊

I went on a visit to Qingdao with my parents this summer.It is a beautiful city with so many places to visit.But what impressed me most was Lao Mountain.

I got up early that morning.It took us about an hour to get to①there by bus.Then we started to climb the mountain.There were trees and strange stones everywhere.The clean spring water flew along the mountain.I took some spring water and taste②it.It was fresh and a bit of③sweet.We enjoyed the beautiful scenery while walking relaxingly.Two hours later，we were on the top of the mountain.

It was an unforgettable experience.

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陈传光男，35岁，中学一级教师，现任教于江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学，从事教育教学工作11年。江苏省教育学会会员，连云港市优秀教育园丁，赣榆区优秀班主任，赣榆区先进教育工作者，赣榆区教科研先进个人。曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖，班主任基本功大赛区一等奖。有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表。“十二五”期间3个市级课题已经顺利结题。

1.优点:

本文是一篇关于旅游的记叙文。作者选取了其中给自己印象最深的一个景点进行描述。文章按照登山的顺序，着重描写了登山的过程，表达了自己对崂山的喜爱和爬山时的愉快心情。整篇文章文字流畅、用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。

2.需要修改的地方:

①to去掉。非具体地点there前要省略to。

②taste改为tasted。结合上下文，此处应使用一般过去时。

③of去掉。a bit后接形容词或副词，a bit of后接名词。

3.评分:

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。