A Lovely Cat

【栏目要求】

1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；

3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；

5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

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本期点评名师

石继忠 男，1989年参加工作，中学高级教师，济宁市骨干教师，市级教学能手。工作中，立足实际，认真搞好教学，创造性地开展学校的教育教学、教改科研工作，在教育这片田园里勤奋耕耘，积极探索，不断改进教学手段，吸收先进的教育理念，在多年的英语教学工作中，积累了丰富的教学经验，形成了自己独特的教学方法。从教以来一直从事初中毕业班的教学工作，在历年的中考中，所执教的班级都取得了优异的成绩，受到学校和社会各界的一致好评。先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇，现担任《英语周报》、《英语辅导报》、《学生英语报》、《英语画刊》、《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。

A few days ago， my mother brought home a little cat. I was very happy. She would be a member of my family. I wanted to give her a nice name and decided to call her “Mimi”.

Look！How① a nice cat！ She is black all over except her four feet and a small nose.

Every morning she gets up earliest. Then she always climbs up my bed and wakes me up. When we sit at table having our meal， she often runs under the table and even climbs onto our knees. She seems to say， “Let me to② join you. I want something to eat.”

Mimi likes to lie on the floor in the sunshine. But can you guess what she likes best？ She likes playing with a ball best. May be③ its not strange to you. Sometimes， the little cat tries to hold her tail with her feet. She tries very hardly④， but she often fails， for her tail moves while her body moves. She looks more lovely when doing that.

I like Mimi very much because it gives us great joy.

山东省梁山县杨营中学初一 刘棅华

1. 优点：

本文语言生动，层次清楚，比喻恰当，浅显易懂。用拟人的手法，把小猫的外貌特征、可爱的动作都展现在读者面前，使人感到小猫不仅可爱，而且给家庭带来欢乐。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① How改为What。What引导的感叹句：what+a/ an+形容词+可数名词单数+主语+谓语；How引导的感叹句：How+形容词+主语+谓语；

② 去掉to。let后加动词原形；

③ May be改为Maybe。maybe是副词，意为“大概，也许”；

④ hardly改为hard。hard意为“努力地”；hardly意为“几乎不”。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。