A Little Elephant

刘玉龙

Last Sunday， I went to the zoo with my mother. There are many people in the zoo. In front of the elephants house， we saw a little elephant. It was very funny. It was about 1.6 meters tall and its body was like a wall. Its legs were like for little trunks. Its head swung from one side to the other. So did its long nose about one meter long. And the nose was like a water pipe. One its head was bright eyes and big ears. Then I saw the elephant rolling up some grass and putting it into its mouth with its nose. How interesting it was！ Sometimes the little elephant was very naughty， but sometimes very quiet. I like it very much！

【简评】全文语言朴实，自然流畅。虽然只有一个段落，但小作者却能通过寥寥数语，向我们展现一头有趣又好玩的小象。内容安排合理，层次分明。

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