Li Hua

话题：同学之间

山东省莱芜市钢城区里辛一中九年级四班 尚梦琦

We are glad Li Hua has improved a lot this term. One year ago， he didnt study hard， and often had an argument with others. He dropped litter everywhere and he was very dirty. He even played computer games until 12 oclock at night. So many students didnt like him and far away from him， he felt lonely.

But now， he has changed a lot since our teacher talked with him. For example， he never drops litter， he spends more time protecting school and classenvironment. He gets on well with our classmates. Certainly， he takes part in all kinds of school activities.

I hope it is a new start in his life and he will do better in the future！

指导教师：吴海燕

【点评】

1.文章利用了现在完成时，一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时等多种时态，多种句式，使文章更具层次性。

2.语句简练，过去，现在，将来把人物的改变描述的淋漓尽致。