I want to be a doctor

My dream is to be a doctor. When I was a little child， I used to be sick. So my parents had to take me to see doctors. They were very friendly to me and cheered me up every time. With their help， I am very healthy now. Since then， I have hoped to become a good doctor. In order to achieve my dream， Im studying hard to get more knowledge. I hope to go to a college to learn more. If I learn more， Ill know how to make patients healthy. Ill give my love to the patients as much as possible and help them out of danger. My mother always tells me to become a useful man and help others in trouble.

I think to be a doctor is really great. I think my dream will come true one day.

简评：王艳同学能够结合自己的成长经历，清晰描述自己有这个梦想的原因，并且正在为之付诸行动。短文时态准确，语言流畅，感情真挚。

（指导教师：李池红）