Plugging One's Ears While Stealing a Bell

Once a thief found the bell on his neighbor’s door so beautiful that hewanted to steal it. And淤as soon as he touched the bell， it made a very loudnoise.

Then he said to himself， “I must do something about noise于.”He thoughthard and at last he had an idea. “Ah， I’ll put some cotton in my ears. Then thenoise can’t be heard any more.”Then he did so and pulled the bell hard. Thebell rang loudly but the thief did not hear something盂. With another hard pull hegot the bell off. Just then the neighbors came out and caught him.

The thief thought as long as he himself couldn’t hear the noise， neithercould others. What榆foolish the thief was！

河北省阜城县第四中学 季慧波

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张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作30 多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

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优点：小作者以故事发生的顺序为线索，生动形象地叙述了“掩耳盗铃”这个故事。总体而言，这是一篇不错的英语习作。

需要修改的地方：

①And 改为But。上下文有转折意味，因此应使用转折连词。

②noise 前面加定冠词the。这里特指上文提及过的noise，因此加定冠词the。

③something 改为anything。否定句中通常使用anything 而不是something。

④What 改为How。感叹句的引导词how 多修饰形容词或副词；而what 用来修饰名词。

评分：按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17 分。