The Spirit of Lei Feng

The spirit of Lei Feng is great. It’s very important for us to have the spirit ofLei Feng.

My friend Jim is very kind and helpful. He is always there to help others. Iused to be too shy to speak in front of class. I always kept silent on myself淤.So Ididn’t have any friends. Luckily， Jim tried his best to help me deal with myshyness. He always encouraged me to express myself bravely. What’s more， hetalked about everything I was interested with于. Now I’m more outgoing than I usedto be. I dare talking盂in front of strangers. I will even join the speech competition.

Thanks to my best friend Jim， I have learned Lei Feng’s spirit from him.Now， I always help others in need in my life.

湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学 徐云翔

本期点评名师

任新超 男，湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学优秀教师，从事教育工作多年；在省级刊物上发表过若干篇论文；曾在襄阳广播电视台英语新闻栏目担任播音员；曾获得湖北省微课比赛三等奖、襄阳市微课一等奖、襄阳市教学能手、襄阳市青教赛三等奖、公开课教学竞赛一等奖等荣誉；指导的学生在各类竞赛中取得了出色成绩，多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。

点评

优点：这篇习作主题明确，围绕雷锋精神和个人成长展开，清晰地展示了作者在朋友帮助下的变化，在结尾部分小作者还表达了对雷锋精神的理解和在日常生活中帮助他人的决心。

需要修改的地方

①on myself 改成by myself。by myself 意为“独自一人”。

②with 改成in。be interested in 是固定搭配，意为“对……感兴趣”。

③talking 改成to talk。dare to do sth.意为“敢做某事”。

评分

按中考英语作文满分15 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得14 分。