Volunteer Activities

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张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作30 多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

I went to Shijiazhuang Museum with my schoolmates to do some voluntarywork last Sunday.

Students of Grade 7 acted as guides， leading the visitors to all kinds ofdisplay rooms. In order to introduce the history of Shijiazhuang in a lively way，students of Grade 8 played a short play. In淤the same time， students of Grade9 made some beautiful posters， and this helped people have better 于understanding of Yanzhao Culture.

According to my opinion盂， this activity can not only improve our ability ofteamwork but also help us get rich social experience. Besides， it’s a good way toshow the youth Shijiazhuang culture.

河北省阜城县第四中学沈梦林

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本文准确使用相关语法和词汇，清楚、连贯地描写了活动内容，并阐述了活动的意义，是一篇值得推荐的习作。

需要修改的地方：

①In 改为At。at the same time 为固定短语，意为“与此同时”。

②have 后面加a。名词understanding 意为“了解，认识”，为可数名词。

③According to my opinion 改为According to me 或In my opinion。介词短语 according to 后面需要接宾格代词；in one’s opinion 意为“在某人看来”。

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按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17 分。