FRIEND

主持人：祖瑞 正高级教师，江苏省特级教师，任教于江苏省南京市将军山中学

Reading

Everyone has friends.On the road of life,we need not only the company of family members,but also the encouragement and help of friends.Only with friends can we have a perfect life.

About friends,we usually think that those who can face difficulties together are true friends.When we are in trouble,friends will help us out.When we are down,our friends cheer us up.

Most of our friends are human beings,but we also make friends with animals and even things.For example,many of us have pets,and we all have favourite objects such as a lucky pen or a diary.Chuck has an unusual friend.Who or what is it?Read and verify your prediction.

In the movieCast Away（《荒岛余生》）,Tom Hanks plays a man named Chuck Noland.Chuck is a businessman who is always so busy that he has little time for his friends.He is a successful manager in a company that sends mails all over the world.One day Chuck is on a flight across the Pacific Ocean when suddenly his plane crashes（坠毁）.Chucksurvives the crashesand lands on a deserted island.On the island,Chuck has to learn tosurvive all alone.He has to learn how to collect water,hunt for food,and make fire.Perhaps the most difficult challenge ishow to survive without friends.In order to survive,Chuck develops a friendship with an unusual friend—a volleyball he calls Wilson.Chuck learns a lot about himself when he is alone on the island.He realizes that he hasn’t been a very good friend because he has always been thinking about himself.During his five years on the island,Chuck learns how to be a good friend to Wilson.Even though Wilson is just a volleyball,he becomes fond of him.He talks to him and treats him as a friend.Chuck learns that we need friends to share happiness and sorrow,and that it is important to have someone to care about.He also learns that he should have cared more about his friends.When he makes friends with Wilson,he understands that friendship is about feelings and that we must give as much as we take.

Tasks

1.Read and pay attention to the expressions in bold.Try to understand the meaning of the word“survive”.

2.About friends,we usually think that thosewho can face difficulties togetherare true friends.句中的画线部分是一个宾语从句，做think 的宾语，而宾语从句中的黑体字部分又是定语从句，修饰先行词those，意思是“能够一起面对困难的（那些人）才是真朋友”。文中还有一些宾语从句和定语从句，请尝试找出来。

3.Can you understand the last sentence?Discuss it with your classmates.

Writing

We have many kinds of friends in our lives,the best friends,the closest friends,forever friends,loyal friends,creative friends,supportive friends,inspiring friends and so on.Please write an article titled“My _______ friend”.

原文呈现

My best friend

What makes the best friends? Some people say there should be no secrets between the best friends,while others think the best friends should be loyal and shouldn’t say bad words about each other.I think my best friend Lily has already told me about it through her actions.

Lily always helps me when I have some questions.I still remember last month,one of the maths problems was too difficult for me to find out the answer.Lily was busy with her own homework at that moment,but she still taught me how to figure out the answer.Don’t you think she’s a warm-hearted girl?

在学习上互相帮助是好朋友之间最常见的方式。既然是最好的朋友，就要有特别的，能真正体现“warmhearted”的例子。

Lily is also generous and shares her things with us.One day,I went to school in a hurry and forgot to take my pencil case.Lily shared hers with me without a single word when she heard this.When I thanked her,she told me that was what a best friend should do.

细节可以突出人物形象，建议增加细节描写。

Lily is interesting too and often tells some funny jokes.We have the similar hobbies and we often talk about our hobbies to get some suggestions from each other.

这里两句关联度不高。建议选择一个方面来写。

I have learnt a lot from Lily since we became friends.Lily is my best friend and I hope our friendship will last forever.

升格展示

My best friend

What makes the best friends? Some people say there should be no secrets between the best friends,while others think the best friends should be loyal and shouldn’t say bad words about each other.I think my best friend Lily has already shown me about it through her actions.

Lily always helps me when I have some problems.I still remember last month,I got a stomachache at school and had to go back home.When I felt better,it has been already very dark outside and too late for me to go to school and pack all my things back.Just then,I heard someone knocking at the door.I opened the door and found Lily standing there with a bag which are full of my books.“Don’t be worried,I have already packed all the things for you.”she said,with a smile.I thanked her very much.Don’t you think she’s a helpful and warm-hearted girl?

Lily is generous and always shares her things with us.One day,I went to school in a hurry and forgot to take my pencil case.Lily shared her new pens with me without a single word.She said that I could use her things whenever I needed.When I thanked her,she told me that this was what the best friends should do.

Lily is also talkative and humorous.She often offers me some suggestions about the hobbies that we both love.When I am in low spirits,she always tells funny jokes and makes me laugh.I really enjoy her company.

I have learnt a lot from Lily since we became friends.Lily is my best friend and I believe our friendship will last forever.

（江苏省南京市将军山中学 黄茹一）

综合点评

小作者选取三个“典型行动”生动形象地把自己最好的朋友呈现到读者面前。修改后的作文抓住描写人物的关键之处——细节来刻画人物形象，即便是最微小的细节，也能体现出深刻的含义。细节的刻画并不仅仅追求副词的运用，而且通过句式的变化和描写的手法来体现，展示了小作者丰富而厚重的阅读积累。