Boys and girls, attention, please! I have important something淤to tell you.
There will be an English lecture on the differences between AmericanEnglish and British English by Mr. Jackson, an American professor from HebeiUniversity. It will give于at the Peoples Theatre from 2:30 to 4:00 p.m. onFriday, November 25. Those who are interested in it are welcome. And youmay invite your friends to attend it. Be sure do not盂to be late. By the way,well have a further discussion about it after the lecture.
The Student Union
河北省阜城縣第四中学 王磊
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张超 男,河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师,从事英语教育教学工作30 多年;多年来,在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇,并有多篇文章获奖;曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作;曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。
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优点:
本文以口头通知的常用模式开头,然后清楚地说明了活动的时间、地点和注意事项,内容结构合理。
需要修改的地方:
①important something 改为something important。形容词修饰不定代词时要后置。
②will give 改为will be given。根据上下文,此处应用一般将来时的被动语态。
③去掉do。be sure (not) to do sth.意为“确信(不要)做某事”。
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按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准,本文修改前可得18 分。