My School Life

I still remember the day when I first went to school at the age of six. All thethings in the school were so wonderful. The school was just like a beautiful gardenfor淤me. I was very happy and excited.

Every morning I get up early. I enjoy reading aloud in the morning. I likelistening to the teachers and answering his于questions in class. In the evening， I domy homework. I feel like a farmer working hard in the fields.

Im busy with my subjects， but I also have a great time play盂with myclassmates. During the break， I often have a rest out of the classroom and talk withmy friends. The blue sky， the white clouds， the flying birds， all those things aroundme make me happy.

江蘇省赣榆县罗阳中学 吕伟祥

本期点评名师

陈传光男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师、连云港市新333 工程教学标兵、连云港市优秀教育园丁，从事教育教学工作多年；曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖及班主任基本功大赛市一等奖；有多篇论文在各核心和主流期刊上发表。

点评

优点：本文条理清楚，思路清晰。小作者从不同角度（从过去到现在、从早晨到晚上、从课内到课外）介绍了自己的校园生活，表达了对校园生活的热爱之情。

需要修改的地方

①for 改为to。to someone 意为“对于某人来说”。

②his 改为their。结合上文the teachers，此处要用their。

③play 改为playing。have a great time doing something 意为“做某事很高兴”。

评分

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23 分。