丛林历险

广东 袁丹纯

汤姆和托德一起去丛林中度假，正当他们午休时，火灾发生了。他们该如何安全逃生呢？

July was the hottest time of the year in southern California. Tom and his best friend,Tod,had planned a camping trip in the Great National Forest for their summer vacation.

Two big boys packed clothes and supplies into a bag,and set out for their great adven⁃ture with the dog Paul early in the morning.Upon arrival,Tom pulled over to the side of the road along the bank of the river.“A perfect place for fishing,”Tom exclaimed in delight.Tod nodded in agreement.Then,they spent a wonderful morning fishing by the river.

At noon, the scorching（酷热的）sun made everything so quiet.With a good harvest of fish, the boys marched into the depth of the forest, followed by Paul. After searching for some time, they finally found an ideal place for the campsite (野营地). The camp was set up immediately as Tom knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper. After that,the two boys enjoyed their special treat—an afternoon nap.However,they were woken up by the shocking and fierce barks of Paul. Outside, heavy smoke filled the air and wind⁃blown flame was skipping from the top of one tree to another.The long dry summer made the forest a tinderbox（易燃物）.In no time,Tom and Tod hurried inside their tent packing their belongings.

“Let's go!We can make it back to the river!”Tom shouted.They headed down against the fire⁃wind in the direction of the river.But Paul barked a sharp warning.Ahead of them lay a thick wall of smoke across the track. They would never make it through that. Tom was uneasy,for it was hard to find a safe way to escape in the heavy smoke.

Paul lifted his head and sniffed the smoke⁃laden wind. Soon, the dog bounded away and disappeared down a sharp slope. The boys shouted at him, but he didn't come back.

Tom couldn't blame Paul for panicking. He himself wanted to run even though he didn't have a clue which way to choose.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1:Tom and Tod hadn't gone far when there was a familiar bark.

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Paragraph 2:

Paul pulled again,in spite of the boys'disbelief,urgently.

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Step 1 语篇研读

文本梳理

在一个酷热的夏日，汤姆和好朋友托德一起带上小狗保罗去丛林中度假。漫长而又干燥的夏天让森林成为一个易燃物，当他们正在午休的时候，森林起火了。他们该如何逃出突如其来的火灾呢？

人物分析

Characters Personalities 1.and brave Tom&Tod Clues●Two big boys set out for their great adventure.●The boys marched into the depth of the forest with Paul following them.●Tom couldn't blame Paul for panicking. He himself wanted to run even though he didn't have a clue which way to choose.●They were 3.by the shocking and fierce barks 2.Paul of Paul.●Paul barked a sharp 4..●Paul lifted his head and sniffed the smoke⁃laden 5..Soon,Alert and capable of saving people the dog bounded away and disappeared down a sharp 6..

Step 2 情节构思

续写步骤

一、根据故事最后一段的情节，小狗保罗跑向斜坡，男孩们不知所措，我们可以预测小狗会找到逃离的路，带领他们走到安全地带。推荐表达有survive from the heavy smoke、escape from、make it back to the river。

二、根据续写第一段的段首句，我们可设置以下问题链并推测：

1.Did Paul find a safe way out?

2.How did Tom and Tod feel when Paul was trying to lead the way?

3.How would Tom and Tod behave?

三、根据续写第二段的段首句，我们可设置以下问题链并推测续写第一段的结尾：

1.Why did Paul pull Tom and Tod?

2.How did Tom and Tod feel when Paul tried to guide them out of danger?

四、根据续写第二段的段首句，我们可设置以下问题链并推测续写第二段的情节：

1.Did Tom and Tod finally believe in Paul and why?

2.What did Paul do to help Tom and Tod out of the heavy smoke?3.Did Tom and Tod reach the safe place with the help of Paul?

4.How would Tom and Tod feel toward Paul in the end?

Step 3 语言打磨

原文语言分析

一、语言特色

1.使用with结构，表达生动、活泼、灵活

With a good harvest of fish, the boys marched into the depth of the forest, followed by Paul.(Para.3)

2.使用暗喻的修辞，表达简洁，内涵丰富

The long dry summer made the forest a tinderbox.(Para.3)

3.“地点状语+谓语+主语”，强调地点，使得重点突出

Ahead of them lay a thick wall of smoke across the track.(Para.4)

二、精彩词块

set out 出发；启程

pull over 停靠路边

in delight 高兴地

the depth of the forest 森林的深处

make it back to someplace 成功回到某地

a thick wall of smoke 浓厚的烟

续写语言提升

以下是续写时可使用的语言表达：

一、行为描写

bound away 跳跃着离开

bark at sb 朝某人吠叫

grab one's jeans 抓紧某人的牛仔裤

push and pull 推和拉

sniff the wind 嗅着风

rush out of breath 跑得上气不接下气

二、使用暗喻

They heard the most melodious music—the sound of rushing water.他们听到了最美妙的音乐——流水的声音。

Their faces blossomed.他们的脸笑成了一朵朵花。