2020年9月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（三）

贾从永

四级

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the use of PowerPoint （PPT） in class. You can start your essay with the sentence “The use of PowerPoint （PPT） is becoming increasingly popular in class”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道四级作文试题要求学生分析校园里的一个普遍现象——用PPT上课越来越流行。这个话题贴近大学生的校园生活，考生们对教师使用PPT上课都有切身体验，可以说最有发言权。

本文可以写成三个段落。第一段开门见山地提出所要分析的现象——用PPT上课越来越流行。接着我们可以通过描述一个细节使这一现象具体可感：不论是在小学还是在大学，你很少见到教师不带这种奇妙工具进入课堂。第二段对这一现象展开分析。我们既可以一边倒地分析用PPT上课的优点，也可以一边倒地分析用PPT上课的缺点。但我们认为从正反两个方面分析更为公允，因为使用PPT上课确实有利有弊。为了使论证充分，正反两个方面都要略作展开。比如，在分析用PPT上课的优点时我们可以指出，对老师而言，如果使用得当，PPT所呈现的信息重点突出，条理清晰;对学生而言，PPT可以帮助他们抓住重点，跟上老师的思路。在分析用PPT上课缺点时，我们可以指出经常看到老师上课只给学生念PowerPoint，而学生无聊地坐在那儿，纳闷既然所有的信息在书上都有，为什么还要来上课。

第三段总结全文，提出建议。我们可以先指出PPT只是一种工具，可能用得有效，也可能用得糟糕，然后建议教师在做PPT幻灯片时要理解学生的信息需求，并在课堂上有选择地和适当地加以使用。

The use of PowerPoint （PPT） is becoming increasingly popular in class. You can rarely see a teacher going into a classroom without being armed with this magic tool， whether in a primary school or in a university.

Admittedly， PowerPoint presentation is a great tool for both faculty and students. One of the benefits for faculty is that， if properly utilized， it highlights the main points and maintains a well-planned flow of information. It also helps students identify the key points and follow their teachers train of thought. But the drawbacks are equally obvious if it is used excessively. It is not uncommon to see a teacher simply read PowerPoint to his students， who sit there bored， wondering why they bother to turn up when all the information is in their textbook.

PowerPoint is only a tool， and like any tool， it can be used effectively or poorly. It is advised that teachers understand the information need of their students when making PPT slides and use them selectively and appropriately in class. （173 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. You can rarely see a teacher going into a classroom without being armed with this magic tool， whether in a primary school or in a university.不论是在小学还是在大学，你很少见到老师不带这种奇妙工具就进入教室。

2. Admittedly， PowerPoint presentation is a great tool for both faculty and students. 诚然，PowerPoint演示对教师和学生都是一个极好的工具。admittedly诚然，用在句首表示让步，后面常有but、however与之呼应。

3. It is not uncommon to see a teacher simply read PowerPoint to his students， who sit there bored， wondering why they bother to turn up when all the information is in their textbook.经常看到老师只给学生念PowerPoint，而學生无聊地坐在那儿，纳闷既然所有的信息都在课本上，为什么还要来上课。

4. It is advised that teachers understand the information need of their students when making PPT slides and use them selectively and appropriately in class.建议教师在做PPT幻灯片时要理解学生的信息需求，并在课堂上有选择地和适当地使用。“it is advised that...”是提建议的一个常用句型。

六级

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the saying “Wealth of the mind is the only true wealth.” You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

本题要求考生论证一句谚语——精神财富是唯一的真正财富。这句谚语的意思是精神财富对我们最为重要。要写好这篇作文，我们首先要明确一个问题：什么是精神财富？精神财富是相对于物质财富而言，主要是指一个人的学识、信仰、意志、道德修养等内在力量。

本文宜写三个段落。第一段开门见山，引出所要论证的谚语，并指出其寓意。第二段阐述为什么精神财富是唯一真正的财富，即论证精神财富的重要意义。精神财富对我们的意义是多方面的，限于篇幅，可以只举出其一端：精神财富可以帮助我们克服障碍，实现人生目标。我们不妨以美国盲人作家海伦·凯勒为例来证明这一点。海伦·凯勒身残志坚，克服了重重困难而成为美国著名作家和社会活动家，其成就鼓舞了无数人。她获得如此不凡的成就靠的是强大的精神财富，一个精神上贫穷的人是不可能取得这样的成就的。第三段先指出，虽然物质财富对于体面的生活必不可少，但只有精神财富才能给我们带来深深的成就感，让人生变得有意义，最后号召读者重视精神财富的积累。下面请看参考范文：

An old saying has it that wealth of the mind is the only true wealth. It means that though material wealth is admirable， it is spiritual wealth that is most valuable for us.

A person with high integrity， profound knowledge， a firm conviction and a strong will can be described as spiritually wealthy. A growing body of evidence indicates that wealth of the mind helps us overcome obstacles and fulfill our life goal. Helen Keller， the American author and social activist， is a good example. By dint of an indomitable spirit， she overcame her handicaps to become the first deafblind American to earn a Bachelor of Arts degree. One of the most widely-admired writers of her time， she inspired millions of people with disabilities all over the world. Obviously， a spiritually poor person could not have obtained such an achievement.

Material wealth is absolutely necessary for a decent life， but only spiritual wealth will give us a deep sense of fulfillment that makes life worthwhile. Therefore， let us give more importance to the accumulation of wealth of the mind. （179 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. An old saying has it that wealth of the mind is the only true wealth.有一句老话说，精神财富是唯一的真正财富。

2. A person with high integrity， profound knowledge， a firm conviction and a strong will can be described as spiritually wealthy. 一個具有正直操守、渊博知识、坚定信仰和坚强意志的人可以被称为精神上富有。

3. A growing body of evidence indicates that wealth of the mind helps us overcome obstacles and fulfill our life goal. 越来越多的证据表明，精神财富帮助我们克服障碍并实现我们的人生目标。

4. One of the most widely-admired writers of her time， she inspired millions of people with disabilities all over the world.作为她那个时代最广受赞誉的一位作家，她鼓舞了全世界数以百万计的残疾人。

5. Obviously， a spiritually poor person could not have obtained such an achievement.显然，一个精神上贫穷的人不可能取得这样的成就。