李惠泽
要求:你有位朋友,名叫张和平,13岁。他的电话号码是:463-8943,在第十中学。他的房间很整洁,书放在书包里,字典放在桌子上,3个棒球放在桌子下面。他是一名好学生等。
请根据以上所给信息,可以适当发挥,以“My good friend”为题写一篇文章。
My good friend is Zhang Heping. He is 13 years old. His phone number is 463-8943. He is in No.10 Middle School. His room is very tidy and clean. The books are in his schoolbag. The dictionary is on the desk. There are three baseballs under the desk. He likes sports. He can play soccer, basketball, baseball, ping-pong ball and so on. He is a good student, too. He studies very hard. I should learn from him. I hope we can be friends for ever.
【简评】这篇习作从内容上说要点齐全,符合题目要求,并作了适当发挥;从语言运用上看,所用结构虽然简单,但文章意思表达清楚,语句通顺,准确无误。是一篇成功的习作。
指导教师:齐红娟
My Good Friend 陈子昂
I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Heping. He is 13 years old. His phone number is 463-8943. He is in No.10 Middle School. He is a good student. He studies hard and he is tidy. In his room, his books are in the schoolbag. The dictionary is on the desk. Three baseballs are under the desk. A basketball is under the desk, too. After school, he always plays soccer with me. He likes soccer, but he doesnt like volleyball. Maybe its difficult for him. He often plays basketball with me, too. I really like him.
【简评】本文紧扣主题,思路清晰,语言流畅。分别从个人基本信息、学习、整洁、爱好几个方面介绍了“我的好朋友——张和平”。是一篇较好的中学生习作。
指导教师:齐红娟
编辑/丁俊玲